|Reviews for Captain America - The Last Campaign|
| Canucklehead Cowgirl chapter 21 . 3/26
I love Tilby so much. He's just wonderful.
| Canucklehead Cowgirl chapter 20 . 3/26
You wrote this so beautifully, I actually teared up with Jackie's story.
| Canucklehead Cowgirl chapter 15 . 3/26
Clever Superman nod there, sir.
| Canucklehead Cowgirl chapter 7 . 3/25
I'm trying not to review every chapter or every other, but this one has my attention.
The Skull and Viper ... tantalizing and disgusting and evil all wrapped into a clashing devious pairing.
They're perfect for each other.
| Canucklehead Cowgirl chapter 5 . 3/25
You write Fury very well ... which is wonderful to see. He's a complicated cat.
Pym - I hate Pym, but you very nearly made me like him here. Very nice work.
| Canucklehead Cowgirl chapter 2 . 3/20
A lot here to love.
"Don't be sorry, be precise." what a military thing to say. I love it. And Agent 13 being one tougher than the Dirty Dozen. That right there is awesome.
| Canucklehead Cowgirl chapter 1 . 3/20
First of all ... Miran sent me your way. We're on the Collaboration together and she mentioned to me that I might like your work. Seeing as you're a COMIC guy that leans far closer to canon, I had to take a peek. I love what I'm seeing too.
Please keep up the good work.
| J.D. Finck chapter 2 . 11/28/2013
just a test
| Guest chapter 20 . 6/14/2013
Please update. I've read your entire story in the past two days and it is amazing! I can't wait to see what happens next. You've done such a great job creating characters and building a story. It seems like it's real and like I'm there living the chapters with them. I love the suspense in every chapter that always keeps me on the edge of my feet. Please update as soon as possible!
| Miran Anders chapter 10 . 4/1/2013
Man, a lot happened here. It seems like more than one chapter... And a lovely cliffhanger. Great action scene, amazingly easy to follow. Good stuff.
I recommend using the novel convention of the three asterisks - evenly spaced across the line to indicate a change in scene without actually starting a new chapter. On FB I use a line oOo line. It's not strictly necessary, but in a format where they don't allow you to leave more than one blank line, it can trip a reader when the conversation is suddenly between two other people.
I had a little trouble with the idea that Carter would suggest 'outing' Holder. I just don't know if that really has impact anymore, unless he's "happily married". In fact, I think marital impropriety is much more sensational these days than someone being gay. If it was back in the forties, maybe, but not now.
Looking forward to more
| Miran Anders chapter 9 . 3/30/2013
| Miran Anders chapter 8 . 3/30/2013
I liked the 'you're right', repetitions. I could see it acting out and it made me laugh.
The tour of his old neighborhood was really nice. I was afraid it would feel like it wandered off the story, but you kept it tight and quick moving, close to his heart. I'm wondering what the card is that he mailed off...
And it is really nice to meet Sharon Carter for real...
| Miran Anders chapter 7 . 3/29/2013
Steve's conversation with Joey was interesting - it seems that you're gathering quite the force here. And now that Schmidt knows what's going on with Cap, everything has been accelerated. Nice use of tension.
I'm not sure about the Viper - she seems a little one dimensional so far (compared to your other women, Jackie and Jan), but I'm sure there's more in store...
| Miran Anders chapter 5 . 3/29/2013
The Wasp and Ant-Man! I feel like I'm in a time machine.
I liked the relationship here - the fact that she went to check on him because she was worried could have, in some fics, turned into a marriage ending situation. (Ever so realistic...) For him to be upset - more because he was worried about keeping his word to Cap - but still let it go, because they are partners... was much more satisfying.
I like the humanity you give your characters. Bad backs, worries, bending rules - little details that make the story much more realistic, even given the supernatural nature of, well, superheroes.
| Miran Anders chapter 4 . 3/29/2013
Whew! A lot to cover in this chapter. Again, well written, the pace very clean and crisp, I wouldn't worry so much about trimming here. (A couple spelling trips, but you have to give an editor something to do...)
I like the other heroes showing up - a little Petey is always fun (he was one of my favorites in my misspent youth).
I enjoyed Steve driving on the English highway, and it was fun and a bit of a revelation to have him in casual wear - including the Yankee's cap. His relationship with Jaqueline is comfortable and well-established; I felt like you'd written about these two before. It was lovely.
Prince Namor! I haven't thought of him in years... it was good to see him again. It was also a good character for Steve to open up to. After all, Namor would never break his word. You captured his intolerance and pride very nicely, along with his serious sense of honor. Oh, and there was one or two moments in the description of his outfit that tripped me - because I work in theatrical costuming. I can tell you what they were, but I'm not sure they'd matter to 'civilians'.
I don't know a lot of Steve and Jackie's history; or how much you created, but it's very easy to follow. And on to the next.