Interesting.

The bit dealing with how Twilight and Spike passed the time with their friends chatting the days away at Hagrid's.

The Dildozer is sorry, he accidentally hit post before he finished.

Fantastic read! Grammar and punctuation were on point, the dialogue was interesting, and I took a particular liking to the bits that dealt with how magic worked and such. Had my interest the whole way through, though there were some issues.

The introduction could have used a bit more flare. Something a bit more colorful than just a brief description of a place and happening; something that'll snag the readers' attention and perhaps showcase a bit of characterization, unless you just wanted to give people a gist of how your narration would be handling itself.

And as for the narration itself, it did usually feel a bit dry; it was very vague, felt somewhat like it was just something you wanted to plow through to get to more dialogue and interaction. It was handled fairly well by comparison in Chapter 7 (the bit dealing with how Twilight and Spike passed the time with their friends, and the but up until that point everything was hard to visualize for lacking detail, and that which you did manage to describe felt at least a bit mechanical, and while I suppose that's more a matter of style, I do think you should experiment with adding more feeling to it. More descriptive verbiage as to how a place looks, the emotions it invokes in characters, or might in your audience. "The quick, brown fox jumps over the lazy dog", as opposed to, "the fox jumps over the dog", basically.

heh heh heh.. Harry asking Twilight to stay near him when people see him so he'll appear normal. Yeah the two most non-normal folk hanging around one another seen like that and the media will think they were dating or something. That comes up and I will not stop laughing..

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Interesting. The statement about Harry's summer situation reminds me that Twilight may not be able to just stay at Hogwarts if the Ministry has anything to say about it. It would be pretty cool if Twilight could remain for the seven years of Hogwarts or at least until the defeat of Voldemort which with Twilight in the picture could be sooner rather than later. The thing about dimensional travel or any travel across space and time is that time is irrelevant and returning for Twilight and her cohorts could be mere seconds after they left or even decades even if they left this moment. So when they return home is not really a matter of when but how and of course whether they are willing to go home right away once things get worse in this world. The real reason I want to see Twilight remain is for many reasons. One, I would love to see book five occur and how Twilight would handle both the DA and the frog. Two, interactions between Twilight and the rest of Weasleys as well as her being introduced to the Dursleys (which would be priceless). Three, Luna. She is one of my favorite characters and she reminds me of a mix of Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie. There are more reasons but those are the main ones.

Jeez. Draco the jerk.

Yikes.

I kinda figured that the magic gene was recesive.

I thought she'd be a dead ringer for Ravenclaw/

Must be odd to try and wave a wand without hands.

You know. As Transfiguration teacher, she could make a sort of reverse animagi out of Twilight and Spike.

It's a pity that Twilight's so innocent that she can't tell Quirrell's using her to get around the protections.

Ah well, MLP is a generally innocent place, so it'll be good for her to learn the realities as they really are, including that you can't trust everyone you meet.

I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH! The interactions between Twilight and Spike (how are you supposed to pronounce his full name?) and all the others is amazing and just yay for this story existing. I like that your showing some development for characters we don't know about from H.P. canon/cannon? like the care of magical creatures guy.

Well as always the flow is marvelous the trial was an excellent way to introduce just how bigoted the wizarding world is and how much more intelligent twilight is compared to the average wizard. I'd like to see more interaction with Twilight and harry. These have become less of reviews and more me professing my thoughts at you.