Reviews for Second Chances |
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![]() ![]() ![]() He clearly isn't welcomed but nothing could be worse that the Dursleys. |
![]() ![]() I absolutely love grandmother characters like Lady Agatha. So great |
![]() ![]() WHAT THE HELL! WHY SWITCH TO FIRST PERSON NOW? |
![]() ![]() Not another flashback! |
![]() ![]() I know that this story is finished but for future reference, all these flash backs make a story hard to follow. it is like you thought of something you came up with later and instead of rewriting you just added it as a flash back. |
![]() ![]() Are you so easily swayed by someone else to change or add to your work? you are doing fine on your own. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I don't know. I'm not sure how long this break is but weeks or months of psychological abuse and just that weak apology doesn't sit right. Maybe it's just Harry's upbringing with no love that he'll just cave at the barest hints of affection but he's just a doormat right now |
![]() ![]() ![]() I guess this is a HP/DG story but I really fucking hate the Daphne you're writing |
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![]() ![]() ![]() While it CAN be used in connotation to household pets/animals, the word "fondle" is used almost exclusively in an erotic sense in the English language. You pet animals, you fondle another person's genitals. I cringe every time I read that someone is fondling the cat. |
![]() ![]() This 1st person shit sucks. Fucking 36 chapters in & you start fucking up the POV? WTF man! |
![]() ![]() Switching to 1st person out of the blue was awful. |
![]() ![]() Ginny has to die now. You do not torture someone's pet and get to live. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story |