|Reviews for Harry Silvertongue|
| Marinelife37 chapter 6 . 2/14
Interesting story. That Harry possesses the diary is new and interesting plot twist. Great job.
| Lazov chapter 6 . 2/12
Drat. Why must all the decently written fics hang in the proverbial limbo? I don't suppose you'll be coming back to finish this, will you?
| MelkiorShade chapter 4 . 1/30
Interesting take on the character of Martin Centaurus, reminds me VERY strongly of Mordin Solus from the Mass Effect series. Not quite sure of the motivation for him, but if there is any house that Mordin would belong to, it would be Ravenclaw.
| katyj13 chapter 4 . 1/21
It's Mordin! That's great!
| Infernus est in animo chapter 4 . 1/4
Based of whats his name scientist from mass effect who dies in the 3rd one and isn't centurus a system or something or is it based on Cerberus
| Lord Mortensen chapter 6 . 12/29/2013
Cool! can you update?
| Quizer chapter 1 . 12/13/2013
The major grammatical problem I spotted here is that you somewhat consistently write general statements in present tense, such as 'He realized Will's lessons about guilt don't really work without context.' But because the story as a whole is written in past tense, you can't do that - these statements have to be in past tense as well. Your other story, which is written in present tense, was nearly flawless from a technical perspective, since this problem never came up.
You can also try and phrase it in such a way that tense becomes a non-issue. Instead of 'It must be because magic has little, or perhaps nothing to do with physical size', you can write 'It must be because of magic having little, or perhaps nothing to do with physical size'. It might be best to try and avoid phrasings where this becomes an issue in the first place.
I really liked 'A Curse of Truth'; it was really well-written and funny, though I was dissatisfied by the ending. Do characters originating as self-inserts not deserve a happy ending? Still, it was a very enjoyable read, so I'm checking out this story as well. I hope you fix the grammatical stuff so it can be as good as the other one!
| dragoncreators chapter 6 . 11/21/2013
This is really clever, and realistic to the dangers of a little talking book. even the most innocent-like things...
| dragoncreators chapter 4 . 11/21/2013
Man, martin reminds me of that old alien scientist from Mass Effect. you should look it up. Great story, love it!
| Samurai911 chapter 4 . 11/17/2013
I would say that Martin is inspired by Mordin Solus. The parallels between the two characters are rather obvious: Brutally honest, talks fast, Extremely Intelligent... I could go on but we be here all day.
| punttooblivion chapter 2 . 11/7/2013
I have to admit that your writing is better than most but there is nothing else here to carry my interest. There is nothing here that hasn't been done before by other authors. My main problem is that you don't seem to have decided between having Harry as a charismatic slytherin or as a wary bullied boy resulting in him fluctating from outwitting malfoy in a verbal exchange and pulling a knife on someone on physical contact.
| Formulaic chapter 6 . 10/26/2013
Your portrayal of the diary's effect on Harry is quite compelling. I don't know if you've considered it yet, but the fact that Harry himself is a Horcrux could have interesting implications on his interactions with it. To reconcile with canon, I suppose you could say it made it easier for him to resist than for Ginny, but I think other directions could be much more fun to explore. That's actually an idea I'll have to try writing about someday.
| kazemaru gin chapter 6 . 10/22/2013
I think you've handled Harry's perspective rather well and don't know what people are complaining about. I could see myself doing the exact same thing as Harry in the same situation; he's only eleven years old, still relatively new to the magical world, and is under the influence of a powerful dark artifact. It'd be unrealistic if he DIDN'T get trapped by the diary!
| SakuraWolf11 chapter 6 . 10/17/2013
Wow, I am really enjoying this interpretation of a Slytherin Harry so far. It subverts many stereotypical interpretations I've read in the past and I am eager to see where you take Harry next.
| Merrri chapter 5 . 10/3/2013
You did say you were a perfectionist... Will and Harry use the word 'ass' instead of 'arse' in the first couple of chapters.
...Sorry to jump on the 'Gaah, Americanisms!' bandwagon... :)