|Reviews for Raven|
| bbrae104 forever chapter 11 . 3/29/2014
| The destroyer of fate chapter 11 . 1/26/2014
great story and I might get round to reading the sequel if I get time
| Miko873 chapter 1 . 3/24/2013
| a random person chapter 9 . 12/25/2012
Ok, first of all, I am extremely harsh to every story so please don't take anything personally/as an offense. I like the idea of this story, but It feels more like a skeleton of a story than anything, little detail or plot development. Watch out for your caps letters, they shouldn't be caps after a comma, also try to vary the sentence structure as well the tags on speech. Add more details of emotion, facial expression as well as expression in general Ex. He teased. VS. He mocked, his thin mouth twisting into a cruel smirk. The 2nd one sounds more exciting and helps create a picture. If you can do that with most of your imagery you'll be good to go. As I said, its a good idea but detail and a solid plot are the things to work on. Try creating a plot diagram/ story arch to help you with that so you know where you are in the plot and what you need to follow.
You're doing great,
A random person
| Anon chapter 1 . 12/20/2012
If you do end up making some sort of sequel, I hope you create a better and solid plot to it.
| Guest chapter 8 . 12/18/2012
Update soon please I love this story so much
| Pizzachic chapter 10 . 12/20/2012
Uh oh, so this isn't the end?
This is a great story but could you please add more detail.
| Guest chapter 6 . 12/18/2012
Oh my gosh, gotta keep reading..gotta keep reeadding!
| CreationImagination chapter 10 . 12/20/2012
Aweosme is there more chapters or a sequel? -crystalxx
| ilikehats2 chapter 10 . 12/19/2012
MORE MORE MORE PLEASE
| chinaluv chapter 10 . 12/19/2012
| chinaluv chapter 9 . 12/19/2012
Shell be okay!
| ilikehats2 chapter 8 . 12/19/2012
Oh my- I I don't know what to say
| BeingWhoIWishIWas chapter 8 . 12/18/2012
O.O Raven DIED?
| chinaluv chapter 8 . 12/18/2012
Thats so sad!