|Reviews for The Baby-Sitters Club: Thanksgiving Feast|
| Strider Hien chapter 2 . 12/12/2012
Listen to your critics, please. You can't just expect praise and pats on the head. People improve better if they get some criticism at least. A lot of people do point out that your fanfics are dialogue heavy. Everyone is just talking and talking like robots without any emotion. Everyone has no emotion or feeling when yhey talk.
Such as someone going 'Wow, that is amazing,' said Mary Anne.'
She doesn't sound excited, does she? Normally, someone would exclaim that they are excited or amazed with an exclaimtion mark. You learnt these in school I hope.
You tend to over use 'said' a lot. Ease up on that.
You need to add some action in these stories. It's just all talk and no action. What are some of the places like that the characters are at? Or are they all in one huge room with nothing?
| Toxic Truffles chapter 1 . 12/9/2012
Deleting your stories over one review shows how immature you are seriously you shouldn't write.
| Cel1ca60 chapter 1 . 12/9/2012
You do realize that deleting stories and reuplaoding them because you don't agree with signed reviews is against TOS, right?