|Reviews for Immortal Shadow|
| Angel1698 chapter 24 . 1/17
Please continue writing the chapter because unlike other writers who have shorter chapters and a short story u however exceeded my expectations and I love u now. So please don't give up on me now, please. *shows puppy dog eyes and begs*
| Guest chapter 22 . 10/9/2013
Dont dont dont read of questions confusions in this story and somewhat irelevant, full of crappy and nonsense detail, but still for the author try to expand more sense and ideas specially put a little charm of romance between d main charachter and your book will surely more appealed to d readers,
| Pineapple chapter 24 . 10/7/2013
DON'T DELETE DON'T DELETE!
| Pineapple chapter 23 . 10/7/2013
No no IT WAS SO BEAUTIFUL! But ill admit it kinda burned out... Still the best thing I have ever read!
| Bellemort2432 chapter 24 . 9/22/2013
I think this story has a lot of potential, but you NEED NEED NEED a reviewer, or editor, or somebody, because in those last eight-eleven chapters, your grammar was awful, the conversation didn't coherently flow, and the plot completely unraveled. Further explanation into many characters and species was needed, and the reason, in my opinion, that this story went downhill, was because you kept changing your mind about how you wanted the story to go. It might be have been helpful to stick with the original plan, because I liked the way the story started, but when all of these other elements/species were added in, everything became convoluted. If you wanted these other species to be involved, they had to be introduced in the beginning and explained in more depth, not randomly dropped into the plot.
However, with that said, I think that this story has a lot of potential, and, with the right editor, it could go far.
| Bellemort2432 chapter 13 . 9/19/2013
It's a very interesting story line, but there are a lot of grammatical and contextual errors. It's a great start, though, and I can't wait to read more!
| Miss redfoxess chapter 1 . 9/15/2013
2 chapter !
| Hello chapter 24 . 9/15/2013
Hey! You seem to have a wide imagination to this story. :) applause ! Ahm.. Its nice but its gettin' more complicated as I read every chapters. I suggest you rewrite it. :) just a reader.
| Guest chapter 24 . 9/13/2013
I vote start from chapter 2
| Guest chapter 24 . 9/13/2013
| PiptheSnake chapter 24 . 9/13/2013
From the second chapter. Don't delete this
| BehindMyName chapter 24 . 9/12/2013
2nd chapter and onwards! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
| wolf9653 chapter 23 . 7/27/2013
No! I loved the story!
| daring2dream chapter 23 . 7/10/2013
Not necessarily a bad decision on your part - it is what it is - and it seemed like you may have had an end goal with the story but it's hard to tell where it's going right now...most likely something with the Talismans I'm guessing. It wasn't horrible but it did seem to get kind of lost towards the end. I think you'll do well going back to the story at some point and doing a rewrite, you'll probably get more ideas when you do and clear up some of the story line. Not bashing the story at all btw! Good luck on your future endeavors! :)
| L4N498 chapter 22 . 7/9/2013
Please update soon! It's a real cliff hanger ! •