|Reviews for The Dust|
| meelee729697 chapter 1 . 8/11/2013
Phew! U scared me a couple times. I feel like I can breathe now. :)
That was amazing. Ur fantastic tales always have me holding my breath, on ths edge of my seat, or crying. - When they sterilized her... Ugh! I hate them for that, too. That was sad. :(
When E was telling her goodbye, "sorry" to save her... wow.
So thankful they got the hell on the other side.
I dunno where u come up w/ this stuff, but I love it! I would like to take a walk thru ur brain & maybe get lost there.
| mooch66 chapter 1 . 6/5/2013
What a good story. It was well written and able to draw me in. It was almost a movie in my mind. You should be proud.
| Erikajo chapter 1 . 1/28/2013
What a super cool story!
| miaokuancha chapter 1 . 1/23/2013
Wildly original reweaving of the canon elements of sparkle and sterility. Beautifully visceral prose. This is a gem!
| WD-Den-Mum chapter 1 . 1/23/2013
Wow. This has definitely been a favorite entry from the contest. It really hurt to read, in the best way! And such a different concept than most of the entries, I loved it. I would love to read more, if you do decide to continue. Thank you so much for writing, great job!
| sillyvamp chapter 1 . 12/25/2012
Excellent. So well written.
| Rebadams7 chapter 1 . 12/22/2012
Somehow I am sure they made it
security with no freedom isn't secure at all
| suziefknQ chapter 1 . 12/19/2012
Amazing. Adored it.
| OdetoSunshine chapter 1 . 12/19/2012
Hi :)) I really enjoyed your story! Are you going to let us know what awaits them on the other side of the Dust?! And of course if Edward makes it?! Let me know if you are going to continue the adventure, I would love to read more! You are a very talented writer, Great Job xxxx
| Sweet-Frenchie chapter 1 . 12/18/2012
Oh my god!
It was so good :)
| GothicTemptress chapter 1 . 12/18/2012
Vican, I hope you continue this because it's THAT good. My heart pounded in my chest through so much of this! As always, I love your writing and hope to see more from you! Congratulations on the contest/awards, my friend! *hugs you hard*
| NKubie chapter 1 . 12/17/2012
Ahhhh. I can't believe you just end there!
That was fantastic, Vic! I was right there with them with my heart in my throat. The descriptions were excellent and the pace amazing! Certainly a far cry from UtS. ;)
I had a feeling that "The Dust" might have been more propaganda than anything else and that perhaps the early disfigurements and illnesses might have been due to radiation poisoning then, but that no longer exists. Many generations have passed since then. I think I may have read and seen too many post-apocalyptic worlds and have become a bit cynical. Anyway, the way you portrayed this was wonderful!
Congrats on the Honorable Mention, but I think you deserved much more!
| scarletoctopus chapter 1 . 12/16/2012
I love this. It's a cool, different dystopian story that's been written beautifully. I felt everything Bella felt from her desperation to get out, her grief over her lost children and her love for Edward. Brilliant writing, Vic!
| SaphiraGoddess chapter 1 . 12/16/2012
Loved it! The suspense and anticipation was just...ahh!
| CullensTwiMistress chapter 1 . 12/16/2012
This was amazing and I'd love to see what's on the other side.