Reviews for Forage the Forest |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Thank everyone for the reviews and sticking with this story. Please keep reading and reviewing. I appreciate all the reviews. Please keep it up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter! I love Snowfeather's warrior name! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey Tie-Dye! I liked this chapter, it moved it a bit fast, and some more detail would be great. Good chapter! -Rain |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey Tie-Dye! Anyway, good chapter, I liked it, and I like the names Snowfeather and Redecho. My only problem is the name Lionblaze. I sometimes use names from the books, but only minor characters, that hardly anybody knows/recall's, such as Rainleap and Ebonyclaw. It will become confusing if you use names of major characters, such as Fireheart, Squirrelflight, Jayfeather or Ivypool. Also, try to add some more detail. Instead of just 'Snowpaw walked over to Cloudstar' maybe something like 'Snowpaw padded over to Cloudstar, her eyes wide with excitement' or something. Anyway, great chapter! Keep writing! -Rain |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice chapter. I understand why you can't make them longer. Homework sucks. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter! Did I miss something, because Swiftpaw says they are going to be Warriors soon... I thought they had only been at the Clan for a couple of moons? Or, did I forget something? Anyway, my only problem is its short, you could add more detail, and the repeated 'saids': [Redpaw said "Yeah I'm starving! Oh yeah I almost forgot, Snowpaw, me and you are going on the dawn patrol tomorrow." Snowpaw said "Okay great. Hopefully this is my last patrol as an apprentice." Swiftpaw said "What do you mean?" Lionpaw said "We're going to be warriors soon." Frostpaw said "Wow, that's great!"] Keep it up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay! I made an account, my reviews will be from MauMeow1 now! MauMeow (Now MauMeow1) |
![]() ![]() Ooh...I love all the action in this chapter! |
![]() ![]() YAY! I wonder what their warrior names will be! ;D |
![]() ![]() I think this was a fantastic chapter! Nice idea when you they retreated without a fight. I think you did a great job ont his chapter even though it was short. But that's okay! Please update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter, as usual. It refer's to the gray tom that Frostpaw is fighting as Pebblepaw, but how would she know that? Also, I'm Robinpaw, I got an account. PLease feel free to read and review my story, Apprentice's Journey. Keep writing, - Robinpaw/Rain |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay, awesome chapter! This has to be one of the best fanfics I've ever read! |
![]() ![]() That was really good. I think you did a great job on this chapter! YAY! Keep UPDATING! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter! |
![]() ![]() Ooh, I wonder what they're apprentice names will be! :3 love this story |