|Reviews for Race for Love|
| sexbell chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
Well I don't think storybrooke has an airport since no one ever go's or leaves storybrooke but really like this good job
| JadedSinceConception86 chapter 1 . 12/17/2012
nice quickie story.
| hope2x chapter 1 . 12/17/2012
| Slave2Writing chapter 1 . 12/16/2012
I think this story would have been more effective if instead of summarizing the fight that they had, you had actually written it out and brought readers into the scene. It's hard for a reader to make an emotional connection with the story if they don't have enough details and if the scene they're being asked to take an interest in is written as if it has already passed. You could have written out the fight with more detail, such as what each was wearing, what the room looked like, the emotions each was feeling, etc. By the time we see Regina catch up to Emma in the airport, there's not much tension for readers because we weren't really included in the fight that the characters are supposed to be resolving.
I think if you had put as much detail into describing the fight as you did the scene of them getting back together, it would have been a better story.