Reviews for vodka will not ease your pain
DreamsRWhatUMakeThem chapter 1 . 2/23/2013
Aww I really liked this. Great job.
starryjules chapter 1 . 12/18/2012
I REALLY enjoyed this. You touched on some really great, bittersweet moments and found a great voice for Ziva through them all. I especially loved the Tali part. :) Thanks for sharing it with us!
emmaswanskillian chapter 1 . 12/18/2012
Okay, hi! You told me to read your story and offer a few suggestions.
1) I know it seems fun to break up a story like this, but unless you've been writing for a reallyyy long time, it's somewhat difficult to make it flow. So I would try more continuity-ish stories until you've written more.
2) You did pretty good at describing emotions, but don't be so factual about it. "She thought this" or "he thought that" is hard to connect to. Try making it deeper, more descriptive, and less straightforward.
3) Make sure you proofread and reproofread for grammar mistakes. That's one thing that turns alot of people off from a story is a mispelled word or grammatical errors.
-Other than that. it's not too bad. The only way to get better at writing is to keep writing.
xoxo,
Alex, aka keepcalmandshiptiva