i have enjoyed this story. Alas it appears I will never know what happens next!

Meh, the story starts of strong then gets a bit desperate around chapter 17ish and then boring. The focus seems to be more on the girls loving eachother than anything else, Harry is more of a catalyst to outing the girl love than a joint partner. Then the story is unfinished. At this point it could have ended when Dumbledore was petrified and just had him killed instead along with the death eaters.

Author seems to forget what was written in earlier chapters. Hanna does a quick 180 from potter to Longbottom and despite both boys agreement to talk about it nothing is done then we have paragraphs of Susan and Hannah.

Oh and in all of this, he supposedly set up for unknown girls to get medical help but hasn't bothered to do that for gin gin yet took control of her through life debt, that is pure forced drama. You can't have him be super aware, caring and insightful and yet totally stupid about just her.

Also: She felt the tip of his arousal just below her navel before she relaxed once more against him, rested her head against his c

Is incredibly uncomfortable and can be quite painful.

Ok I'm done: "I don't think I'm ready for that yet, Harry," he heard a mostly-awake Hermione say.

Yet she has no problem doing slightly more with a girl she barely knows compared to Harry. Someone she has supposedly been in love with for over a year and can literally feel his love and they have confessed to eachother.

Also Harry's supposed hormones are very under represented despite his mental age. That means it needed to be shown how much he struggles in comparison to how easy the girls are with eachother.

This is impossible: she thought and slid her wand out of the holster she now wore on her forearm. A holster that

Harry snapped her wand as soon as he took it from Tom in the chamber and put the pieces in his pocket. Gin gin has no wand and couldn't have gotten one as she went straight to the hospital wing then the Potter suite and hasn't left once.

Honestly, unless Harry starts getting sexual attention (other than the brief few minutes from Padma) this is becomes more of a lesbian harem story with Harry as the excuse than a love story between Harry and Hermione and their capacity to love fully others.

Yes girls that age tend to experiment more and are more open to such things than guys are (we can be quite rediculous about it), this is more the girls pairing up with Harry as a side dish, i.e. all would be well if Harry wasn't in the story.

If you ever continue writing know that this: "Hermione, I was worried about you. Luna was worried about you," Daphne said quietly, holding the slightly-younger witch's attention

Requires Daphne to have been born between September 2nd and 18th in 1979. Any older than 2 September and she would be a 3rd year when Hermione was a 2nd year.

I can't quite suspend disbelief (just above Donald Trump being a model human being) when it comes to the Unicorn/Snape scene. It is infinitely easier to believe a harmed story where the women have a choice (ish), than Snape being a good enough person to get anywhere near a unicorn.

Gringott's rarely found a witch or wizard who treated them with some small amount of respect

I always have issue with this when in the story the Goblins make no effort to teach new magicals and treat them like any other witch or wizard who've lived in their world for years.

In very rare stories is it seen where goblins make an effort to preempt the bigotry taught at Hogwarts.

Honestly can't agree with how easy and quickly Snape has changed. This is mainly due to lack of AU info on how he normally is. In the previous timeline/world all indications are that Snape is as horrid a human and professor as he was in canon. There is nothing so far to indicate that is different here.

That's just going to far: everyone present that Harry felt Draco was his equal.

But it is very slytherin of him in a slimey way.

I just don't see Draco as worth saving he attempted and failed to kill quite a few people before Just Kidding Rowling had him back down during the horcrux hunt.

I also wouldn't ever call him a leader.

So far I am enjoying the details that this story has, it is enough to understand the new world Harry finds himself in and gives just enough to show that his previous world was not quite canon either.

Smita sounds more like a pervert taking advantage of 11 to 12 year old girls than a concerned older cousin.