|Reviews for Mist of Memories|
| Guest chapter 39 . 9/21
I am really surprised how depressing you could One Piece out to make. All those things that plagued Luffy wasn't that depressing in canon. You go on and on about how alone and weak Luffy is, how he lost everyone, etc. But the truth is he lost just Ace... Sabo is alive, his crew never died, he couldn't expect to win against Admirals at age 17 without Haki and his 3 years older brother was free, he managed to save him, but he died because he had to fight a Admiral over petty words instead of saving himself/his brother. So I see not a single point why he should be so down that isn't your imagination / you twisting the facts around.
On a side note, Luffy should somehow by now have figured out that Hancock loves him. Either by seeing the memories again or due to his friends. How can he be so dense and how can your story not involve romance :(
| Guest chapter 32 . 9/20
Well, like I wrote in my previous reviews, I like the memory watching and commenting plotline.
But the whole "so sick of guilt that his soul shatters plotline" is overly dramatic and uncalled for. I mean, come on, he is a good captain, all his friends are alive, okay and after 2 years of training stronger than ever. His brother Sabo is still alive, even when he didn't know it yet (he should have suspected it! He didn't see the incident and no body was found!). Even Bon Clay may still be alive (maybe he found safe shelter in lvl 5.5 or snuck succesful out as a guard). And he managed to free Ace, sure, Ace died a few minutes later, but he died free, fighting, protecting his little brother... it shouldn't even be Luffys job as a 17 year old newbie without control over Haki to protect his 3 years older brother who is Logia, has Haki and is overall stronger... Ace and Whitebeard should be strong enough to protect themselves. He should just think about that: if he died now, drowning in guilt, forever sad, leaving his crew behind, Aces death would be meaningless. So the whole plotline is completly meaningless.
All the hardest memories (seeing his friends die, accusing him and being a slave) orginate from non canon movies. All that canon material shouldn't be hard on him. Usopps betrayel wasn't Luffys fault, Sabo is still alive (even if not, it was Sabos own fault and that of the 'Nobles'), Aces death wasn't his fault, he should live his dream and be happy in honor of Aces memory.
| Guest chapter 26 . 9/20
I really really don't like the fact that you use non canon material. I think Zizu and Shiki are enemies from different movies, but I don't really remember them. The material wasn't written by Oda, I think, so it shouldn't find its way into your fiction...
| Guest chapter 20 . 9/20
Hmmm, I like the whole 'lets watch Luffys life like a movie together and comment it' plotline, but to include fillers and movies is a bit strange of you. I don't like them much.
| Guest chapter 3 . 9/6
Aw...Yep. Garp might be a horrible guardian, but he does care for Luffy.
| Guest chapter 45 . 9/5
please make more
| rinardi.warasaji chapter 24 . 8/15
| Caraline Fisher chapter 44 . 8/2
This was a wonderful story!
| AnimexXxGoddess chapter 17 . 8/1
I also forgot to mention that I really really like this chapter. The interaction between Luffy and Ace is beautiful. Ace's personality was perfect. I almost thought this is what happened in canon and I've just forgotten it.
| AnimexXxGoddess chapter 45 . 8/1
This story and its prequel is ah-mazing! I think I read them in like three days! Thank you for making such a story that's moved me to tears! I've cried several times reading both stories. It's so heart breaking and full of love...
I kind of hope you write a bonus story of Luffy meeting Sabo in Dressrosa. I mean I think it will go a bit different right? Or maybe the crew's reaction to knowing Sabo is alive now that they know Luffys past.
Again, thank you for this brilliant story.
| Boop-Ba-Doop chapter 21 . 7/19
It still hurts
| Avo385 chapter 38 . 7/3
You really know how to money a person hate a character that has not, nor ever will exist. When reading both this and the previous chapter, I got really passed off at the entity or whatever it is.
| tsubakiyuzuki chapter 13 . 6/18
Zeff did not eat his leg. He lost it when he saved Sanji from drowning.
| jovysanchez17 chapter 5 . 5/20
This was a wonderful representation of the events in Romance Dawn! I love how you added those mean kids again in the equation, Robin is right when a person is lonely they will try to get the attention of others even those who had abused or hurt them before. Nevertheless, it's good to see that even if those kids were mean at least Luffy still has Makino, the Mayor and teh other adults by his side. I love reading the Strawhat's reaction to the events of Romance Dawn, it would be awesome if that will also be their reaction if Luffy ever shares his life stories to them in cannon. Throughout this childhood with Garp and Shanks I bet the ones who understood a lot because they shared the same experience were Chopper and Robin (bullying and abuse), Usopp (being alone after mother's death), and Sanji (the lost limb and father figure incident). And yes, it would be good if the crew understood why Luffy admired Shanks in canon like how they understood it here. :)
| jovysanchez17 chapter 4 . 5/20
This was a wonderful chapter! I'm glad that it didn't start with the events of Romance Dawn. It's a good thing that you tackled the event of the Red Hair Pirate's arrival, Luffy's shift from fear of pirates to understanding of the circumstances are good to see. It's quite sad to see his home that is not a home, I do believe that with how busy Garp is and with how Dragon is basically nonexistent in Luffy's life that he may have lived in a house all by himself. That's just sad, you made Luffy's childhood painful before the actual and canon pain that he did endure in Romance Dawn and his childhood as ASL. But it's not really a bad thing, I can think of it as something very plausible to happen.