Reviews for Embracing your Inner Demon
Mr Bean chapter 1 . 12/22/2012
Not bad. Like the story so far but I have two major issues.

Why change his look so drastically in the first place? He already had foxlike attributes and higher senses than humans. It would have been much better if his appearance had changed to his initial jinchuuriki form or also called zero tail form (red slitted eyes, long sharp nails, sharp teeth and thicker whisker marks). It looks looks far more monster like. Not to mention that giving him a furry fox tail and fox ears is too much of a cliche in this crossover genre and it looks stupid in my opinion ( like he is the result of his father mating a vixen XD ).

The narutoxura pairing: Don't get me wrong I think it's cool BUT it can't work. Vampires are immortal and he is not. You made him a kitsune human hybrid and the keyword is human which means he is mortal. And I don't think it is possible to change him into a kitsune vampire human hybrid.

Looking forward to the next update.
Invincible Minds chapter 1 . 12/22/2012
Interesting... I'd like to see more come out of this. Good start.
Guest chapter 1 . 12/22/2012
Why the fuck would he need to get permission to go in the first place he's not a fucking ninja any longer they've got no say over what he does as a civilian. What the hell was he doing to make money since he wasn't a ninja any longer. Why the fuck did you have to make him a stupid fucking furry. Why the hell do you think it's a good idea to make this a bloody love triangle between him, Moka, and a pussy bitch. And why do I get the feeling this is just going to follow Rosario canon plus Naruto.
ZariGS chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
Well that was different; not bad in any way, shape or form, just...different.

I look forward to more :D

Guest chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
Update more often
Kid Coheed chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
So far so good, although I love Moka, I hate splitting her and Ura up especially since Ura eventually takes a small interest in Tsukune when he comes back all Vamp'd up. I fact make the Pairing for Naruto eather Mizore or Kurumu. witg Mizore it's the loneliness factor that she seems to see in Tsukune must be Ampped up for Naruto. Kurumu it's her ability to display her devotion to the one she "loves" something that Naruto needs seeing as he has never had someone that has been willing to state loudly that someone cares or even loves him. Even if you leave Tsukune's girls alone then Give Naruto a girl from early in the series like Tamao or someone similar. Thats my one hope and I hope you take this into consideration while writing keep up the kick ass writing and I hope to read more very soon
ultima-owner chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
He should "greet" the school with pranks
omar.cornelius.9 chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
keep it up... i want to
The Flippant Writer chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
Good start. Nothing to criticize so far. I await the next chapter with baited breath.
ddcj1990 chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
Nice first chapter I like it
hugp1x chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
A few things, the first of which isn't too important:

It's Haruno Sakura, not Haruna. A little nitpick that was slightly annoying.

The second thing that really gets on my tits when Naruto (or any character in any japanese-esque fiction) gets foxy attributes is the fox ears. Do I have a problem with them? No. My problem stems from their positioning. Not only does it look stupid when I picture it in my mind, but it makes no sense to have them 'on the top' of his head. Naruto already HAS ears. Why would he grow another pair on top of his head? Elongate the ones he has and give them a furry tip on the end and it immediately not only looks better, but makes more sense than the two alternatives; Having four pairs of ears like some weird alien monster or Having two fox ears on top of his head and nothing where his normal ears should be (also super weird).

My third and final point is to denote my confusion. After 'accepting' his youkai self, why is he still losing control when he draws on more tails? You had Kurama himself saying the only reason it hurts him is because Kurama's youki gets converted, the same should be reasonable for the tails of power. Such a limitation doesn't really make sense either. It would be better, if you like, if Naruto gained access to more tails of power the stronger he gets and physically cannot go 'higher' than he is ready.

It's a bit early and short to comment on anything other than nitpicks. I'll keep my eye on this story for a few more chapter before I give a final verdict.
war12345 chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
like it need more
NIX'S WARDEN chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
Hey like the idea but questions. 1. When is this? 2. When you say naruto has one tail can use three of kurama's does that mean naruto has four tails or 1 is his and the other are barrowed? 3. How can naruto his increase the number of his tails? 4. When he uses kurama'a youki is it just red energy or is it like his red or gold fox-cloak?
Guest chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
luv it! and please no harem for Naruto, not only is it used, but Ura would, no she WILL kil ANY women
flocking near her boyfriend let alone flirting with him!
(my opinion is, if youre set on your mind for a harem, leave the canon Tsukune fangirls be and
look for other gorgeous teenage girls who had minor or one-time appearences like:
Tamao Ichinose
San Otonashi
Lord of the weed chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
Seems promising. I like that you don't plan to simply replace tsukune with naruto and I'm glad that you are above that. What surprised me a bit was that no one was freaked out by the bus. It's not a common sight in the ninja world/dimension. I personally think Mizore has more in common with him and would be a better choice but at least it's not a harem story (almost all RVnaruto crossover have harems and I'm getting tired of this). If enemy ninja will make an appearance and I'm sure akatsuki will not give up that easily then please try to find a balance between monster and ninja powers. There are ninja like the sandaime raikage who could fight a monster/demon like the hachibi on equal ground and nibi was defeated by kakuzu and hidan.

Question: He should still wear tsunades necklace. Wouldn't it prevent naruto from using kyuubi's youki?

Looking forward to the next update.
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