|Reviews for The Mole : Disguised Disgrace|
| Moley Koopa chapter 16 . 3/6
Yeah, what a nice chapter. I felt like that I spotted a clue last chapter: Bullet was last in the player intro last chapter, and he got executed. Next up was Shokora, so I think she will be next. Then it's my counterpart... *cries* XD But a nice chapter as always!
| Sepron chapter 16 . 3/6
This challenge should be interesting. I'm not sure who to root for though! And I agree, Bullet made a great foil for Enguarde, that's probably why I liked him so much, he's the biggest contrast to the rivals. As always, fantastic job!
| Soui chapter 16 . 3/6
LET THE STORM RAGE ON, THE COLD NEVER BOTHERED ME AYWAYS.
Chapitre ordinaire, mais c'est souvent comme ça lors du premier chapitre d'un nouvel épisode, à mon goût. Le défi commence, les choses se placent, il y a du placement et les réactions de l'éliminé, etc.
Bon côté : Melody m'insupporte moins ! dats like tottly an achievement girl.
Waitress est toujours aussi clueless, je la kiffe.
La scène du début avec Boo qui est grognon/toujours endormi m'a fait sourire, et Monty me rappelle un certain Toady... :missfrance:
IN HAKIMA WE TRUST ! :coeur:
| BoomShroom chapter 15 . 2/25
Whoa, I was not expecting that! I'll be honest, I was worried that Melody was going to be going home, mostly due to the fact that an annoying swordfish helped boost his and Bullet's score. But Bullet being eliminated, even with a plus one? Maybe if he had taken his quiz a little faster, things would have turned out differently. I really liked him, and it's a shame to see him go. But someone had to leave, and I'm glad it wasn't Melody, Shokora, or Kolorado.
As for my suspicions, I suspect Kolorado, but I also don't suspect him if that makes sense. He didn't really do anything this challenge, which can either raise or lower one's suspicions of him. Why didn't he help more? How did his lack of actions lower the amount of sabotages? It all depends on one's perspective.
Another that I don't really suspect is Blanche. Sort of like Kolorado, she stayed on the back lines this challenge, only voicing an unseen character in the play and not talking charge and making bad calls like Melody. She also helped to 'save' the play by making it look like the actors' mistake was all an act. It didn't awkward them too many coins, but it probably helped them actually get any money.
Still suspect that silly little Boo. Not as much Shokora.
Waitress actually impressed me this challenge. Although she kept most of her mannerisms in the play, she remembered most of her lines. Of course, she did fail when she froze on stage and forgot what to say. Unless...if she said those lines weren't in the play, than perhaps Melody and/or Enguarde had mistaken it for the play they were previously rehearsing? It's quite possible given that Enguarde accidentally used a name from the other play. Perhaps they were at fault and not Waitress. Also, they started the argument which ultimately led to their failure.
I'm kind of glad that Bullet left, but also sad. He was a good player. Anyways, hope to see more soon!
| Kirboolesex chapter 1 . 2/21
Hand on heart ...
HAKIMA IS GREAT !
HAKIMA IS THE PEOPLE !
GLORY TO HAKIMA !
*pom pom pom..*
ps: Your fic is su-pe-rb ! Looking forward to the next chapter
| Soui chapter 15 . 2/21
Comme je te l'ai dit, je ne m'attendais pas du tout à cette éxécution. Le chapitre m'a fait réfléchir sur mes suspects, surtout parce que Bullet était ma deuxième Taupe. Waitress est encore totalement épique et foune, Kolorado (ouais, bon, je suis pas original, mais voilà) fait partie des gens qui remontent un peu dans mes suspects.
Blanche reste au top pour ses actions bizarres, Shokora et Boo sont égaux, Kolorado passe 3eme, Melody monte bien haut, suivie par Waitress et Enguarde en dernier (que je ne vois pas du tout endosser le rôle de Taupe, quoique je peux me tromper étant donné le résultat de l'éxécution malgré le bonus de Bullet).
Néanmoins... bon chapitre, je m'imaginais souvent être dans les spectateurs à la place de Boo et Shokora, qui j'imagine bien, se facepalmaient souvent. XD
Je détecte un indice sur la 4eme rangée, ce n'est forcément pas par hasard que c'est celle-là qui s'est "allumée". Hum... je creuserai en détail.
| TheDimensionMaster chapter 15 . 2/21
In this episode...
"I DON'T, LIKE, WANNA, LIKE, FREAKING, LIKE, MARRY, LIKE, THE, LIKE, UGLY, LIKE, HAG, DUDE." Yelled Waitress.
"LIGHTNING ABUBUBUBUBBUBUBUBBU!" Yelled Kolorado.
"Muahahahah. I am so evil. Ahahah." Said Enguarde boringly.
"Lalalala" Said Melody, playing with her barbies.
" OMG IM A NARRATOR HEEEEEEEEELEELLLLLLLLLLLPPPPPPPPPPPP MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!" Screamed Bullet.
"LIGHTNING ABABABBABBABU8BUBUBUABUABUBABAUBUABUABBUABUABAUA!" Screamed Kolorado.
"Hi Rosalina! Wait, was it Doopliss or Mario... Wait! You're Pennington... No, Kirby? Jojora? Koops? Samus, Mimi, or Dimentio. Ghost. T? The Traveling Copying Blasting Star Super Bowser Bros. Sisters? Said Enguarde.
"LA BLANCHE IS HERE HAVE NO FEAR IT'S A ME SUPER GREEN HULKING BAT BLANCHE GIRL BOY!" Sang Blanche as she dropped from a girder above.
'LIGHTNING ABUBUBBUBUBUBUBUBUUBUBU" Laughed Kolorado, dancing around on stage.
Nobody liked the play except for the row of deaf and blind goomba's sitting in the front row who thought they were listening to a traditional Hungarian Dance. But, in a mistype, Monty accidentally transfers 1 million into the winners account, while Shokora watches in prison.
"DAMMIT" Yelled Monty, opening fire on the Banker Toad with his handy dandy flamethrower-knife shooter.
"You're going ta jail, mate." Said an Australian police officer, dragging him to jail.
'Now watch, this is the good bit." Says Shokora as she talks to Monty in prison.
"LIGHTNING ABUBUBUBUBUBUBUBUBUBUBAUBUABUABABUABUAUABAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBABAUBAUBAUBAUBAUAUBAUBUABUABUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUBAUAUABUBAUBAUBAUBAUABUABAUBAUBAUBAUABABUABUABAUBAUABUABUABUAUABAUBABAUBAUBAUBAUABUABUABUABAUBAUBAUABUABUABUABAUBABABUABAUBAUBAUABUABAUBAUBAUABBAUABUABAUABUA!" Screams Kolorado.
| Moley Koopa chapter 15 . 2/20
Bullet, one of the only 2 players that I don't like is gone. XD But I guess that Enguarde tied with him. Enguarde and Melody's relationship is getting extremely tense and I can't wait to see what happens next.
P.S. Poor Noki, she was invited in the game to stand in front of a permanently closed door. XD
P.P.S. I think this chapter's title, The Worst Performer led me into believing that Bullet, the one who said he is the worst performer shall be executed, looks like I'm right!
| Sepron chapter 15 . 2/20
Aww, poor Bullet. I'm sad to see him go. I'm happy Melody and Enguarde made it through though! I loved the challenge in this episode, not mention seeing Noki, my favorite character in the first story! As usual, I loved it!
| AdmiralBobbery chapter 15 . 2/20
Well, I didn't like Bullet anyway. I don't really like him or Enguarde, simply because I have a hard time envisioning them in my head since I guess they sort of fly around or something in order to move, I don't know, but their lack of practical mobility makes me dislike them.
Anyway...after all that awkwardness, good chapter! I think Shokora made up for her massive sabotage during 'Money Rafters' in 'To Play or be Played' because she literally did nothing. Boo can be blamed for making bad purchases, but Shokora was sensible with her money so, I can't blame her for anything.
I think it was Enguarde who made excellent points about Kolorado during the quiz, because the old explorer is under the radar sabotaging in a way. He screwed up the cellphone and dropped the light, so he's looking a bit more suspicious. However, his ace memory sort of surprised, and it makes me think he's the mole even more because no true player would write such important suspicions in the open.
Melody is not the mole, flat out, she's trying too hard. Her lines were perfect, so she aced another challenge. I don't think the mole would ever play as hard as Melody does. However, I do find Enguarde and Melody annoying, because like Shokora said, they're costing the team a lot of challenges.
I'm sort of starting to dislike White Mage, because she's losing characterization. Not that this story isn't fabulous, but nothing White Mage does stands out to me ever. She seems too bland as of late. Kolorado is an old and chipper explorer, the bumbling elderly player. Waitress has her valley girl attitude, Boo is the expert, Melody and Enguarde the dominating personalities, but White Mage is just kind of there you know?
However, it doesn't rule her out as the mole, but what does help ebb suspicion is how she came to everyone's rescue during the play. I think if she were the mole, she would've let the fiasco carry on and make Enguarde, Melody, or Waitress look like the mole. So chalk one up for White Mage.
Waitress is smarter than she appears, evident by some of her confessionals. Like when she stated Boo and White Mage are doing all the work for her, she's cognizant of the benefits of her friendships, something you wouldn't expect Waitress to know. I think Ms. Serva shall go farther than we expect, but she's stand-out enough to me to be the mole. I kind of dislike when the mole is super low-key, and even though it makes for a successful mole because no one notices you, I just don't like. Evidence A: Frederique Van Der Waal from Celebrity Mole.
There was a lot of sabotage during the play, from Kolorado dropping the light, to Noki hiding in the storage room with plenty of props, like, how did no one check the freaking storage room? Plus, I had a thought when Waitress claimed she honestly didn't know those lines were there. I think the mole changed the script, except for Waitress's, because then it made it look like she messed up. Anyone could've done this, but it makes Waitress look like less of a mole.
Boo was down for the count this time as well, not doing much while helping out Shokora. I still think his play style is too exemption-hungry, and he's nearing Melody's forte of playing very hard. Alright, I'm done now, posting my updated suspicion list. Fabulous chapter as always Toady!
5. White Mage
| BoomShroom chapter 14 . 2/18
Hoo boy, lots of mistakes and sabatoges this challenge. And the play hasn't even started yet! Really, there were so many things that happened in such a small amount of time that, really, no one is above suspicion. Mostly, I suspect Boo. Being a spy, you would think he might be able to see through a false front like the one that the shopkeeper put up. He wasted too much money on too little stuff. Granted, he didn't know exactly what to get, but he should have known that all of that stuff was way overpriced. Unless, he was trying to waste money on purpose...
This is also why I suspect Shokora a bit less. Sure, she wasted a lot of time and was forced to make some quick decisions, but she knew when something was too expensive, which allowed her to avoid paying too much on something.
Also, Enguarde: IF YOU RIG THE EXECUTION SO THAT MELODY GETS ELIMINATED, SO HELP ME, I WILL BURY YOU ALIVE! *ahem*! Sorry about that...
Anyways, great chapter! I'm excited to see how this play will turn out, and I'm anxious about who will leave the game next!
| Soui chapter 14 . 2/15
Bon chapitre, pas grand chose à dire. J'ai pas de pronostic pour l'exclu... peut-être Enguarde. ou Melody.
Je pense que Koopa est la taupe la plus probable. Mais cela peut changer au fil du jeu. :hakima:
| Moley Koopa chapter 14 . 2/11
Yeah, I do have a talent for acting, but Waitress definitely doesn't. A little thing I picked up though this chapter: Waitress' stage name, Lily is the same to Lily in my Mole story, and guess who Lily's placement at the end is? I will not spoil it. XD
I feel everything going wrong at the same time, but Waitress is still my prime suspect and Melody is a second. I don't exactly want to make a suspect list because it would be plain confusing.
Fav List (XD):
1. Waitress (My counterpart)
2. Melody, Blanche, Shokora, Enguarde
The rest is alright with me if they are eliminated. XD
| TheDimensionMaster chapter 14 . 2/11
On this and the last episode of the mole...
Monty is a bush
"Pssst." Whispers Monty, giving Blanche a hear attack
"ARRRHGHGHGHG" Screamed Blanche as she died an agonising death.
Kolorado flirts with the now revived Blanche
"Hey Blanche, lookin' nice today..."
"Um, thanks." Says Blanche and walks away.
Shokora and Boo over-indulge
"I'll have 17 cakes and 3 10 litre soda bottles, thanks." Shokora pays the vendor 99 coins. "I'll also have that toy rat for 1 coin. Perfect, I've got plenty of nourishment and a great item for them to use, you can never have too many rats!"
"Can I have 3 moustache curlers, a box of moustache fertiliser and 15 cases of moustache wax, thanks" Say Boo as he hands the vendor 99 coins. "And maybe that toy rat too..."
Melody Is bossy
"STOP BREATHING TURN LEFT 0.1223374635 DEGREES SAY IT 0.2891983978828 DECIBELS LOUDER GET ME SOME COFFEE MASSAGE MY FEET AND STOP MOVING SO FAST BLANCHE YOU SUCK SO DO YOU WAITRESS IN FACT YOU ALL SUCK THATS IT YOUR ALL FIRED IM NOW THE ONLY CHARACTER GET OUT YOU NUMBSKULLS"
Bullet is a 5 year old
"Whee" Say Bullet, riding on Kolorado's back.
Waitress is from the FBI
"Put your hands up Shokora, I know you murdered us In chapter 12!"
And everyone is just plain stupid.
"What's a play?" Asks everyone
Hi, just messing around, saw this straight after I uploaded my new story and read and reviewed!
| Vivalahomestar chapter 2 . 2/9
This challenge pretty much sums up an entire season of the Mole. What I mean is that this challenge brought paranoia as to who was telling the truth, moments where every single character (except for maybe Dixie) acted suspicious, and dramatic attempts to complete challenges. There's more here, too, but those are the main parts I'm pointing out. So pretty much this challenge is a perfect introduction to the game for both players and readers! For now I'm sticking with the suspects I listed last chapter (Waitress, Boo, and Blanche, in no particular order). The most obvious examples of their suspicious are Boo and Waitress both claiming to have won the coin toss, but for Blanche there's several occasions where she causes others to mess up, which in addition to her having been to Mario Stadium before makes her pretty suspicious. I'm really really liking this story so far and I can't wait to read more!