Reviews for Scarlett
Ansy Pansy aka Panz chapter 5 . 2/2/2014
Aw this was such a strong chapter, so powerful, so thoughtful, so sad. There were so many extra little bits and lines that gave so much to it.
Ansy Pansy aka Panz chapter 4 . 2/2/2014
Aw this was so sweet and different, I liked getting another perspective. I wasn't so sure about the simile about her hair and the slide; I didn't quite get it, but that's just one tiny thing in the whole chapter!
Ansy Pansy aka Panz chapter 3 . 2/2/2014
So sorry and surprised that you had 'constructive' criticism that wasn't constructive at all! I think your writing is really good and it's enjoyable and nice and flowing to read too. They are obviously silly! And I'm quite a harsh critic, though I do try to keep it balanced too! Hugs.
Ansy Pansy aka Panz chapter 2 . 2/2/2014
This was so funny and sweet and everything all at once. :)
Ansy Pansy aka Panz chapter 1 . 2/2/2014
Aww YAY for Silk fanfiction! I don't really have any particular inspiration or time for a Silk fan fiction but thank you so much to all of you that do, and thank you for your lovely fiction. I like to think about what might have been too. I really like your dialogue, it sounds really right. I'm actually writing an original fiction which has two barristers in who are inspired by Clive and Martha (and James and Lily Potter) lol.
Petworth chapter 5 . 1/7/2014
Be brave HedgieX, time for another of your lovely chapters. I have enjoyed them all. Glad that I discovered Silk and this site a few weeks ago.
Gemma chapter 5 . 3/29/2013
Amazing! Literally in tears! Look forward to the next chapter.
Ami Meitsu chapter 4 . 2/13/2013
I know I’m really not supposed to, but I feel like I HAVE to review this chapter (It’s good. Don’t worry). First off, I must say that the writing has really improved. It flows together more easily and does not seem as jumpy as the earlier chapters, which is a really good thing. As for the actual content, I think you’re doing well with Scarlett’s development and behaviour. Here, she acts like a typical three-year-old, being impatient when it comes to waiting, a half hour feeling like ten years.

I really love how it starts out with Scarlett and Billy waiting for Martha and absolutely adore the comparisons he’s making between her and he mother. That “mischievous glint” as you say is a nice image. And the idea for Billy and Scarlett’s present is adorable, as are the details of him helping her to write and her starting to really form complex sentences. For the record (since you’re a bit worried about getting development right) this is normal. At about three is when kids become more articulate, however, it also depends on the child and how often they’re talked to. For example, I knew a girl who, at three was VERY articulate and talked, a lot. Why? Because her mother had been talking to her constantly as a baby so she would pick up language. On the other hand, you can have kids who were talked to but are simply quiet. (Side note: My Niamh was that way. Worried her parents a lot because of it.) From what I gather in the story, the former applies here, as it seems like Martha did a lot of talking when Scarlett was a baby. Plus there’s also Billy and Clive and the nursery helps, as, being in the nursery allows her to interact with other children who also talk. Her starting to write also makes perfect sense, considering how she’s being taught to.

Anyway, moving on, Billy and Scarlett play a cute game that’s interrupted when Martha arrives and I love how Scarlett is so happy to see her. She really, really loves her Mummy, doesn’t she? And, I’m really, really fond of this line: “How much did she love that child? It hurt him to think of how different it could have been, if Scarlett hadn't survived.” It’s a really good line, and it just sounds right. The conversation Martha has with Scarlett is adorable and I just adore how Scarlett talks about everything like it’s some big event. Kids are cute like that…most of the time. (Being honest, sometimes it can be annoying in real life.) I’m still confused about the whole Martha/Miss thing going on with Billy though. I think I seriously missed something in the series…Help? But, regardless I like their interactions, though there is something I feel I should mention about the family Billy never had. In an interview, Neil Stuke mentioned that Billy was married and had kids, however, I am not at all knocking your idea. In fact, it was mine at first. He just seemed so aloof…I couldn’t see him having a family and think it makes a lot more sense to have him like you do, considering chambers as his family. I can also agree that the Christmas spirit is often lost as you grow up. Nice touch that thought is. Billy’s other thoughts here are particularly interesting as well. I really like how you get into his head as he observes Martha and Scarlett…until the breaking of the plate throws him off. I also really like the touch of him trying to figure out what Scarlett is thinking when she gets shouted at before going back to his thoughts about dinner.

We end on a nice, sentimental note, with Billy agreeing to join Martha and Scarlett for dinner. And then there’s Scarlett, who doesn’t want to be left out, so… “Scarlett reached across and put her hand on top of Billy's. "Pat a cake."” ROFL. That’s funny and a cute place to end…though now you’ve got my attention. I would have really liked to see how the dinner went and how Martha and Scarlett spent Christmas morning…And, now my thoughts are reeling. Not sure if that’s good or bad…

Anyway, in short. GREAT chapter. The writing is really improving and you’re doing just fine with the
development now. And, besides all that…the storyline here is just adorable. The perfect mix of cute and sentimental.

-Ami
SassyRaydorGirl chapter 4 . 2/11/2013
Fabby update sweetie, loooovd it xxxx
GigglingGirl chapter 4 . 2/11/2013
This was so incredibly cute. I love how Billy is Scarlett's godfather. (I've been watching North Square on 4od. You should definitely watch it. It's really good.) I really love the relationship between Billy and Scarlett it's so lovely and makes my heart melt. I love the detail about how he know how much Martha loves Scarlett yet he is unsure whether Martha is making enough time for her. Oh it's so lovely! I can't tell you how excited I was when I was notified that another chapter had been posted. Xxxxxx
csjr chapter 3 . 2/10/2013
I love your writing especially how you write Martha and Clive's interactions. I like the image of him giving her a throw. For suggestions for future chapters, I'd like to see some scenes of Clive being a daddy to Scarlett, or M/C/S as a family. Otherwise keep up the good work :)
Beth Becker chapter 3 . 1/28/2013
Even though I don't like silk, I read this chapter becuase I was bored in Drama *insert laughter*, it's really good. You really don't get enough credit for his fab your wirting is. Don't let people knock you down when you just starting to party with the big dogs *publisherrrr*
Knus,
Beth xxx
SyliaSnow chapter 3 . 1/26/2013
Thank you for the added detail into Martha's inner thoughts and life with Scarlett.

Now, I understand about your issues with "Rude" reviews but I feel this needs to be said: I still have no idea how you see Martha's child. I have a picture in my head, but this is YOUR story. I want to know how YOU view her. I also feel that some of the details you used were in protest of my previous review instead of consideration of it. My review was meant to be helpful for me as a part of your audience to better see into the world you envisioned. As a fellow writer, I was hoping that my review would be better received than a previous review that I agreed with. I also feel that your portrayal of Martha Costello as a mother is a bit overboard. I understand that she is a new mother, however, by two years she should be back in her original character. Plus, her daughter should be sleeping the entire night through. I feel that the Martha you are selling is over emotional and a bit hormonal. It also seems to me that she is suffering from post partum depression, and if so, she should be seeing a doctor for that.

While, I would love to keep up the back and forth barter of information, but I would rather not try to help someone who obviously doesn't want the opposing input.

Thanks,
Sylia "Nome" Snow

P.S. This was no way meant to make you feel bad about your writing. Please do not take it as such.
Hannah Tennant-Cumberbatch chapter 3 . 1/26/2013
I love this story! I love how their just little snippets of Martha and Scarlett's life, not full blown ten thousand word oneshots. The simplicity and the elegance of them all make them special and leave me wanting more. I like how they're not necessarily 'detailed'. Don't worry what other people think- nobody gets everything 100% correct and as long as you're happy with it it shouldn't matter. Writing is supposed to be fun and I love what you write! You have me waiting on the edge of my seat for an update!

Just think of me when you get a negative of overly-critical review. Because, I can guarantee, for every one person who takes a dislike to what you write there's probably over ten who do like it.

Keep writing!

Hannah xx
GigglingGirl chapter 3 . 1/26/2013
Oh Hannah. This is so beautiful. It made my heart well up. The descriptions are so detailed, it's as if I'm there. I love Martha, poor thing. I love that Martha does such mumsie things like going to the park, or singing a lullaby. Awh well done kid. Xxxxx
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