Reviews for All Was Not Well |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Before going back in time, Harry should have getting all the Lottery numbers in the Muggle World. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The mechanics of time travel don't seem to be well laid out. The first chapter seemed to indicate that nobody could go with Harry to the past and that, by going to the past, he was leaving everyone else to live out their lives in the world he left behind. Chapter two now suggests that he could have brought others with him (like Kreacher) and that his meddling would affect the lives of the people he left behind (like Teddy). If the latter two are true, it seems like Harry probably would have done something different, at least offering to take his friends with him, when preparing for time travel. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Way too much exposition in the first eight paragraphs. It did not hook me as I hoped. Change some of the exposition to short snippet interactions between old harry and other characters who might show (not tell!) some of the reasons why he is leaving. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love It. |
![]() ![]() Great story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Adorei , bem original! |
![]() ![]() ![]() nice story |
![]() ![]() ![]() Those 'marriage laws' make no sense. Why would they sully their pure blood with those of lesser blood? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cool story, Thanks. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for leaving it to my imagination. Mine is quite productive which is why I tend to enjoy reading more than I like watching movies and such. I know what my characters look like, where they live, and how they respond in action scenes. I really don't need someone to present me with a drawn out, blow-by-blow description complete with buckets of blood. Thanks for being such a good author. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Pity he didn't tell her about the love potions and maybe even go so far as to off Ron before he left! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very interesting. He is thinking intelligently, I like that as I could always tell that he was capable of it even if the books downplayed it in favor of stressing Hermione's intelligence. But, I am actually a fan of the Weasleys, all of them and love Harry and Ginny together. Still plan to read the rest of the story though as I know it can be good still even if the author ships it differently. |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Robots in a robotic story |