|Reviews for Harry Potter and the Witch Queen|
| Jonuts chapter 12 . 4h ago
Great read. I'm actually really enjoying Hermione in this story. Her ridiculously and excessively verbose response to, well, everything, just seems to fit her so well. That, and stories about a slightly less morally burdened Hermione are a guilty pleasure. She has, in my opinion, the most potential to be an utterly terrifying character beyond anyone actually in the series. Always a pleasure to see a well written story where the author takes advantage of that.
As for alchemy exercises, breaking down simple compounds into their constituent parts is a good one. i.e., Water into Hydrogen/oxygen. Rust into iron and oxygen. You get the idea.
| Lazov chapter 12 . 3/15
Well shit, why do I have the nagging feeling that Hermion WQ took from Harry the love he felt for Luna, permanently at that? She might have said that she didn't want to force him into loving her, even though she could, but she very well could have, from her own perspective, evened out the playing field.
| Lazov chapter 9 . 3/15
Another guess from me: House Elves are the culprits.
| Lazov chapter 7 . 3/15
Just guessing here, but I'm thinking Hermione is leeching off Harry's own magic due to some part of the ritual future-Hermione did, hence why it's taking him so long to refill his reserves.
| Reviewer of the West chapter 12 . 3/2
Very cool and an interesting take on Hermione. Please keep going.
I do wonder what the deal with Luna is. There was that weird thing at the beginning and now in recent chapters he cannot speak her name, but during the sorting hat thing it seemed pretty normal.
As far as Alchemy goes, an elemental sorting and purifying circle would seem not unreasonable. And for bonus points, you get to explore the wizarding financial system and the seeming dichotomy between muggle and wizarding prices and exchanges. The goblins might well have spells on their coins to prevent normal people from performing arbitrage, but alchemists who break it down into components might be able to get around that. Of course, ways around that might involve the actual amount of gold in a galleon (is it fixed by treaty? Is it actually being honored?) and seiniorage. But despite the peter wiggins approach to political power that Hermione is taking, politics costs money and it isn't clear how much of it Harry has. Even ignoring all of this, waste disposal into elements for recycling could be big business on the muggle side if only the inverse Clark's law excuse could be created.
Anyway, keep writing!
| k2omg chapter 10 . 2/27
This is possibly the single best exploration of the possibilities that Hermione's character represents.
Please keep adding to this incredible story, I'm literally checking it just about every day, heh
| Beyogi chapter 12 . 2/25
Wow... this is kinda like the story of Hermione Granger 2.0 told from a Harry Potter perspective. Pretty interesting so far, but you should really let Harry do something.
Thank you for writing this interesting story,
| MajinBakaHentai chapter 12 . 2/25
The only alchemical related exercises I know of is a bit on the dangerous side - heat mercury oxide (an orange or red powder) and the oxygen in it's make-up is released. Dangerous because it's working with mercury - the oxide itself is risky to work with.
The other one I can think of is purifying gold by dissolving it in aqua regia (a mix of acids which is the only acid that dissolves gold), then making it precipitate out of the acid again, into a gold powder. Once the powder is thoroughly washed (to get rid of the acid) it can be melted into a more shiny state (seriously, I saw this on YouTube and the gold powder was a dull ochre colour).
| Caraxian chapter 1 . 2/25
That was a great first chapter. Quite long but not to the point where it was boring.
| alex.rushing.5 chapter 12 . 2/19
Whete is the luna! Whereeee?
| Wordy Rappinghood chapter 9 . 2/19
Compliment, not complement.
"Ms. Granger might be another Merlin in training!"
Good grief! This crush of yours on Hermione is getting worse by the minute. I'm going to stop reading this now.
| TJG chapter 12 . 2/16
Some other ideas:
Harry and Hermione might want to discuss what happened in the original timeline and what happened in this one for this year (and maybe others) to narrow down who/what/group is attacking Harry. Clearly it is focussed on Hermione as mentioned they realized this in an earlier chapter and raises serious possibility that "they" want Hermione to be the witch-queen in the original timeline. The fact that Harry was taken to the same room that Hermione was to be attacked by the troll pretty much solidifies that possibility into certainty. Next would be who stands to benefit and the means for it. From what Harry could see it would be either faeries (includes house elves here) or demons since he knows that she trafficked with both such groups (if I remember correctly) and in myth both such groups have means to not be bound by normal rules of time. Since both such events occurred at Hogwarts presumably the warding would automatically detect and repel any demonically related presence (Harry and Hermione might want to check with Albus on this just to be sure), then that leaves faery-related group since Harry already knew that that there is a "hole" in most wards regarding house elves (and lots of other hostile beings and creatures come to think of it).
Harry and Hermione might also want to discuss with each other more in depth about the whole "mundane" can sense and react hostilely to "wizards and witches". It sounds like that a good solution could be to make a special bracelet or other jewelry (or even a disguised wrist watch) that either masks the presence of magic that mundanes can detect or a sort of specialized notice-me-not regarding magic sensing (this would need to be given when very young so that they have normal social development without the alienation). I wonder if that hostility effect is British specific (presumably passed into myth regarding the treatment of "changelings"), since in other parts of the world such enhanced children probably would be treated more better (typically recognized as someone to go into religious duties like shamans, priesthood, etc.
Some other alchemy related topics that Hermione could pursue:
"Biomancy". The cosmetic magic that Hermione is using is just a start. Understanding the underlying concepts and medical magic could be interesting. There is also Hagrid's bizarre experiments in monster making which seems to indicate that the base magic is easy to do to make "viable" living beings (using the word loosely). This could lead to investigations on the nature of life and magic and the relationships (including how it relates to intelligence boosting by the snakes that were triggered by Harry's parsel tounge usage). This could lead to an investigation of how basilisks are made and their magical biology. Another is to investigate dragons and phoenixes too. Part of this could be to investigate Harry's medical and magical problems and how to both fix them and take advantage of them. One could be to figure out how to remove Harry's mental connection to Tom and maybe figure out how to do it synthetically to make either a hocrux detector/tracer or a kind of voodoo doll that they pound an iron nail into its face to incapacitate Tom (or maybe put a fat needle through its head making it look like one of those archaic arrow-though-the-head gag items). Another is to solve Harry's magic problems and maybe figure out how inflict it on others.
"Machina". Investigation into the relationship between machines (and other technology) and magic. Such investigations could include Sirius' flying motorcycle, the Weasley flying car, the Knight Bush, the Hogwarts Express (presumably it would have a number of magical features), etc. Some side projects could be to make magical constructs to investigate the relationships and how they can be used to make a true technomancy/magitech field. Some side projects could include magical robot versions of owls, snakes, spiders, dragons, humans, etc. The pinnacle of the fields could be "transforming" vehicles, powered armor, smart suits, and space ships. A side hobby could be to make clock-work robots. A side field could be to make "magic black box" devices where magic is used to solve a technological problem in a device that normally can't yet be solved another way (like enabling an ordinary conductor to act like a room temperature super conductor) or allowing a chemical or atomic reaction to take place that would not normally occur under those conditions (like allowing diamonds to be formed from carbon black at mild temperatures and pressures).
Energy manipulation, storage, release, focus, etc. This involves investigating both mundane and magical energies, their underlying natures and how they can be changed to suit her needs. One possibility is to investigate whether magic can be "tainted" (perhaps like a meme/conceptual effect) and whether it can be "cleansed" (sort of like the "mood slime" in Ghostbusters 2). One eventual idea could be to make "holy magic" that can remove curses and disintegrate beings (such as dementors).
Alkahest. Conceptually similar to the above, possibly by magic directly or indirectly. Basically controlled disintegration to components to either some base level or separate components to be purified and used. The various forms of alchemy to do everything that science would call distillation including destructive distillation and may include going down to the subatomic level.
Chrysopoeia. This involves the more ideas of permanent transmutation of materials from one to another. The final result might not even be detectable as magic as magic is used as the means and not used to maintain the final result. Probably uses the concept of conservation of mass and energy for the beginning and final states though magic is involved. Not necessarily restricted to just gold, though specific spells might be specialized for certain inputs and outputs.
Unobtainium. Investigation into making substances and materials with desired properties that may or may not be possible with mundane science. If magic is conceptual/memetic in nature then investigating those that appear in myth and popular fiction is likely to be easier to make than others. Note that "holy water" could be considered as such for this sort of investigation.
| Guest chapter 12 . 2/13
Really Interesting, are we going to find out why he can't remember Luna properly soon?
| TJG chapter 12 . 2/11
AT this point, Albus should introduce the pensive and have Harry show memories of the 2 attacks and carefully go over them with both Harry (and Hermione). The angle of the attacks, the voices, and so forth probably indicate house elves or someone using house elves and a wizard.
For simple exercises for Alchemy, some fictional:
"As above, so below; and as below, so above." Sensing and making changes at one level of reality to affect another. Different levels can include: conceptual (like platonic solids), poetry (like poetic properties of words and art and associated concepts like relating anger to fire), scales of size (forest versus trees), interaction of parts, etc. Lots of emphasis on not only sensing patterns of how reality relates to itself but how they can interact as well.
"Mages play with dice (allusion to Einstein saying God does not play with dice)." Shifting probabilities around ranging from a macroscopic level to sub-atomic level. Exercises could include using magic as a catalyst or enzyme for chemical reactions to reversing entropy and so forth. A fun one could be to make grape juice into wine.
"Purification and dilution." Many technological processes and could be substituted with or enhanced by magic. Like purifying wine into brandy. Or separating the components of a mixture into pure components (like ore into metal, oxygen, and other leftovers).
"Crystallizatons". Like controlling how ice crystallizes from water to form predetermined snowflake patterns. The most advanced exercises could be to make large single crystal high quality gems (like diamond and rubies). Even more advanced exercises could be to make complex jewelry out of different materials.
There could also be exercises of how to distill or synthesize mythical materials. Stones that glow (and not radioactive) with a strong light. Various mythical iron and alloys (maybe if asteroid nickel-iron does have special properties). Various plants and animals that are said to have various magical properties when prepared. Interestingly the basilisk is associated with alchemy (and I think phoenix too).
| Destrark chapter 6 . 2/10
this is hilarious, well done.