|Reviews for Lion Unity|
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 37 . 7/1
Why would Andromeda Tonks make the same statement that McGonagall makes in canon? She doesn't know anything about Sybill Trelawney. Unlike McGonagall she has not worked with her for a dozen years, she also hasn't taken Divination from her and Sybill Trelawney is not a famous seer like her more famous great-great-grandmother Cassandra Vablatsky (aka Cassandra Trelawney, a probable error on Dolores Umbridge's part which Sybill is too upset at the time to correct).
The Potters only managed to stay hidden under the Fidelius charm for one week. What security they employed before then is unknown, but presumably not the Fidelius charm. Why they changed to the Fidelius charm when they did is also unknown. The canon timings are quite awkward and unexplained for the most part.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 36 . 7/1
One of your reviewers didn't think that Hagrid was qualified to teach, and therefore McGonagall wouldn't hire him as a teacher. I tend to disagree. She's under the same budget constraints as Dumbledore was, so the idea of having one staff member instead of two is just as attractive to her. She's also under no Ministry or accrediting agency mandate to hire only teachers with a certain minimum level of qualifications. She merely has to get the Board to approve of her staffing choices, which they would normally rubber stamp with little or no fuss. Hagrid obviously knows his field so he's automatically more qualified than some people that have been hired at Hogwarts. The magical world doesn't have any training for teaching, per se, so really there's no further qualifications possible than a NEWT in COMC, and Hagrid has equivalent experience. The only other character we know of with broad-spectrum knowledge of magical creatures is Lupin, but he's needed for DADA. It should be noted that NEWT-level COMC is not a popular course since there are too many other electives competing for the students' time. None of the golden trio manage to fit it into their schedules even though they like Hagrid and enjoyed his OWL classes. Therefore it seems that COMC NEWTS are rather rare unless they're needed for your career.
Also note that Augusta Longbottom is particularly weak in charms since she failed her OWL in it, yet that didn't stop her from being hired as History teacher in this story. Neither Augusta nor Andromeda Tonks have any prior teaching experience or training.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 35 . 7/1
Always more Luna, please. I really thing JKR should have paired Harry with Luna. I don't like either Ginny or Hermione as partners for Harry. JKR missed that the conversations between Harry and Luna were much deeper and more insightful than those with Ginny or Hermione. She tried to make both Hermione and Ginny strong characters but only succeeded in making them obnoxious. Luna though, had a natural inner strength and beauty that would have really been a helpful and lovely complement to Harry.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 34 . 7/1
Canon Parvati always seemed to be too frivolous for Harry, much like Lavender. Harry seems to like Ravenclaws better. He seems to be attracted to smart women who don't dumb themselves down for men. But this Parvati doesn't seem to be as frivolous and has social skills that Harry needs. It would be a good match.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 33 . 7/1
Yeah, a chapter away from canon!
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 32 . 7/1
Probably should change the name of this chapter since Harry didn't actually meet Sirius Black. All he saw was the shadow of Padfoot. Or change the chapter. There's too much of JKR and not enough of your own muse.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 31 . 7/1
Yep, too much verbatim copying here. I do enjoy Aunt Marge "blowing up" again though. If I were Harry I'd arrange to be gone when Marge was there. He now knows more people's summer plans than just Ron and Hermione, who are both traveling. Neville's home all summer and would appreciate a visit for a week. If this is a story about Harry having more friends and Gryffindor being a real family then he really should get together with some of them over the summer. Maybe even spend a week with each of about eight friends and be done with the Dursleys altogether.
Another possibility is to have Dobby check in on Harry's well-being, keep him well-fed, pop into the locked closet and get his stuff and be the one to blow up Aunt Marge when he overhears her insulting Harry.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 30 . 7/1
Misuse of "regulated" where "restricted" is meant.
Missing "e" at the end of "plane", resulting in "plan to Paris".
This is just a filler chapter looking ahead to next year and the summer break. Not a lot going on except the train ride and the goodbyes at platform 9 3/4. It is nice, though, that Harry has so many friends to keep track of and write to. JKR did everything she could to isolate her hero.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 29 . 6/30
I love the plot to get Dobby freed. It's sooooo much better than canon! And this Cormac McLaggen is actually a pretty nice guy.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 26 . 6/30
Cormac McLaggen got off easy. Most girls would have accepted his offer, then asked her girlfriend to come along and make it a threesome. Then she would bat her eyelashes at him and say "you don't mind, do you?" Then he would have ended up carrying purchases for two shoppers, not just one.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 24 . 6/30
What's Mr and Mrs Weasley's repetitive tradition?
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 23 . 6/30
So what did Ginny's new dress look like that it made her say "What IS this?"
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 20 . 6/30
Yeah! They did it!
I lost track of the diary. I thought it got thrown into the lake and then regurgitated by the giant squid, but after that? Why did the basilisk get loose in the first place if there was nobody down there in the Chamber with it?
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 19 . 6/30
I rather liked Chamber of Secrets. For me, the biggest disappointment by far was Deathly Hallows. Three teens camping in a tent and starving because they failed to plan ahead and pack enough food and completely clueless as to where to look for objects they aren't even sure exist and unwilling to seek help from adults just because Dumbledore loved secrets and told Harry to keep what they were searching for secret while Snape and the other Death Eaters run Hogwarts and the Ministry into the ground. Oh yes, and stupidly wearing a cursed locket the whole time that makes it impossible to think straight after awhile. And add the stupidity of the seven Harrys scenario where Hedwig gets killed just because they're too stupid to let a post owl out of its cage and fly under its own power. And just for kicks throw in a search for the Deathly Hallows and try to figure out the allegiance of the Elder Wand when it can change even when nobody's holding it. What could go wrong?
After that, the three tasks of the TWT plus the magical contract that couldn't possibly be enforceable were stupid enough to make the Goblet of Fire a disappointment, but nowhere nearly as bad as DH. Chamber of Secrets was fairly decent by comparison. A huge poisonous snake hidden in a deep underground chamber slain by a sword to save a damsel in distress are all subconsciously highly evocative images. No, I don't really think a founder would have left a ticking time bomb in the school he founded, especially when said time bomb had no way of identifying Muggleborns versus purebloods. And yes, a Chamber of Secrets should have more than one secret. But all in all, Chamber of Secrets has the least wrong with it of all the books.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 12 . 6/30
Lavender Brown is one of the few purebloods we know about in Gryffindor. Please don't make her a Muggleborn. There's no reason for Charity Burbage to sniff at her age. It's perfectly normal for a 12 year old to like makeup. Even many adult women like makeup. She actually likes much more than makeup: clothes, hair, accessories, nails, shoes, etc. She likes anything having to do with makeovers. And she's not alone in that. Lavender is well-connected socially. Hermione is the odd, ill-fitting one that Charity should be rolling her eyes at.
Liverpool is not a good choice for Hermione's home. She doesn't have a Liverpool accent, which is quite distinctive. She's more upper middle class than that. Harry Potter wiki says Hermione is from London, not Liverpool. However, that is unsupported by any citation and I couldn't find anything in the seven books so it may be just a guess, or from some quote of JKR outside canon. The closest such statement is where Hermione says in book 4 that she told Rita Skeeter that she'd let her out when they got back to London, which may only mean platform 9 3/4 rather than her home. In book 2 Hermione sends a letter saying "we're going to London next Wednesday to buy my new books" so she definitely doesn't live in central London where Diagon Alley is, but rather some suburb near the outskirts of London. I've seen at least one fanfiction that puts her family in Crawley, a New Town 28 miles to the south of central London in West Sussex near Gatwick Airport. It does not have a famous university nearby but it's got everything else a modern upscale family would want. Personally, I would choose a university town like Oxford for Hermione since she loves books so much.