Reviews for Dance For Me (Hiatus)
Guest chapter 6 . 8/13
Please finish! This is a great story! I'm literally dying with anticipation for the rest. Save me by finishing! :O
Guest chapter 6 . 6/26
update please!
Cass87 chapter 6 . 5/22
Follow and favorite story! :)
Guest chapter 6 . 5/16
I wonder how this is going to play out? Is Jake going as an "client" or he going in there and kill? I cannot wait! :) BTW, you didn't make Sherry fragile. :)
Cass87 chapter 6 . 5/16
Hey, I didn't know you update! :) Yay! Jake is coming for his Sherbear. I love how protective he is to her. I don't think you made Sherry weak. Just like what the fellow reviewer mentioned something about her growing up captive with the government has something to do with her personality . I am going to fav and follow this story! :)
droppy chapter 6 . 4/18
PLEASE UPDATE SOON! :)) I know it's probably been a while ( a year actually) but please continue this story because it's amazing! :))
Guest chapter 6 . 3/6
Love the story so much!
Can't wait for them to finally meet!
BriRB chapter 6 . 2/25
love this story so far its amazing, been waiting for the latest update since last yr. grrr lol, i hope everythings ok... sorry for the way i may sound i'm just excited to know what happens next, please don't stop
Guest chapter 6 . 1/27
This is such a good story. I'm just now getting into resident evil fan fics and this one will no doubt be my favorite... update soon
Lena chapter 5 . 1/14
Oooohhhh I am just getting addicted to this story
Lena chapter 1 . 1/13
I'm interested !
leannsj chapter 6 . 1/12
I hope you continue. It's great!
vitashafadilla chapter 6 . 12/21/2014
This is pretty good. You got my attention girl
Darkis Shadow chapter 6 . 11/20/2014
I am liking this a lot :3 The characters seem so alive :D
naoto-san chapter 6 . 11/13/2014
I like this story and I'm curious to see where you take this.

You should be careful with spelling mistakes and some few grammar mistakes. Quite often you're using words that weren't the word you wanted to use. I don't think you do it intentionally I just thought I'd mention it so you can be extra careful of it and proof-read your chapters more.

Also in chapter 5 I believe it was the part with the girl whose hand gets injured you first have the blonde girl say she'll lose the feeling in her hand if she doesn't see a doctor. Then you soon after say that the situation is so bad that she potentially will lose her hand. It was a bit unrealistic because I can't see how in that situation that would be physically possible.

Also I don't think that you've made Sherry look weak. Considering her life and everything she's been through her being strong and mature is not very weird at all. But since she spent so much time of her life living under constant watch of the government and experimented on she most likely have very little experience about real life and many social situations. One situation and environment that she has never been in is the one you put her in. Anyone no matter how strong would be a victim there. They would feel exploited, afraid, vulnerable, just simply being a victim. That does not make Sherry weak especially since you made her both strong enough to handle herself (but not taking it to a point where it seems unrealistic) but also being smart enough to stay alive. I also believe that you've kept her IC during this entire thing. For instance it was not OOC or weak of Sherry to cry and wish for Jake to be there considering he would most likely be more accustomed to the environment and situation. So don't worry about that, you're doing a good job with Sherry so far

With Jake though remember that he isn't Ruroni Kenshin aka he doesn't have two personalities with different skills. You went from in the earlier chapters talking about him being a mercenary as if it was second nature and something that was always present. In this chapter you make it sound as if it's some special persona and skills that he brings out in special situations. It was a bit weird because that's not really the thing with Jake. I mean he grew up in poor conditions constantly looking after his mother. He then became a mercenary when he was very young meaning that it's most likely a part of him all the time. Just be a bit careful about how you portray him. Also you make it sound as if Jake is not as intelligent as he is, so just, be a bit careful about it ;P

Otherwise just keep going, this is interesting and I'm very excited about the next chapter. Keep going!
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