Reviews for A Second Chance
Aria of Life chapter 12 . 1/16
I really like Tamara's story, but I was wonder wondering if you might be open to some constructive criticism.

I just binge read the entire thing, and some parts just seemed to be a little rushed to me. At the beginning of one chapter, Sweeney barley speaks to Tamara, next he's calling her his daughter. I would have loved to see their realationship grow. And William seems like an amazing boy, but we've just met him and now him and Tamara are a couple? He just doesn't seem to really have a character.

Please don't think I hate the story-on the contrary, I think it has great potential. Just don't be in such a rush to move a stray along that you forget to develop your characters and realationship.
mrtickelslol chapter 12 . 5/29/2014
I wish I could satisfy my hunger for another chapter... So far It has been delicious :)
HovaStrider chapter 12 . 3/6/2014
This still needs a bit of polishing, but over all it's better than the other one I read. Much more structure.
VampireSiren chapter 7 . 3/1/2014
Whoa... From what I've read so far, THIS. IS. AMAZING! :D

But uh-oh! Turpin kidnapped Tamara!? That pervert!
Emi Trix and Luna chapter 1 . 10/7/2013
this is cute!
thelovelyflorencelovett chapter 11 . 8/24/2013
I loved this chapter!
LittleValerious chapter 11 . 8/24/2013
I hope so! I love this story!
Guest chapter 10 . 8/22/2013
Nice is it okay if I ask you to let Tamara's relationship last good with no heartbreak
Littlemisslovett chapter 1 . 7/27/2013
2 words: UPDATE SOON!
Nokturnal bride chapter 10 . 7/27/2013
I love it! U are a great writer! Plz update ASAP!
linalove chapter 8 . 7/25/2013
Sweet! :D

xxx Lina
linalove chapter 2 . 7/25/2013
Interesting...I would just advise you to flesh out your characters more...Give us a little more detail about them. For instance, you could have expanded the first scene a little bit...Also, be careful of some expressions. 'A big deal' for example was not used back then. Also, make sure to re-read before you post. That way you spot tupos and such.
Good job!

xxx Lina
Guest chapter 8 . 7/12/2013
I liked it
thelovelyflorencelovett chapter 9 . 6/7/2013
Yay! You're back! So happy to see you continuing and that Johanna is out. Can't wait for the next chapter :3
LittleValerious chapter 8 . 6/4/2013
I loves it! Update soon please!
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