Reviews for Generation
victoriarogue chapter 1 . 6/25/2014
Your theories are probably the most interesting in terms of looking in to a character's background. I hope you do continue to delve into the Drifter's past and maybe Yoshi's also. You have some good points and the explanation of your theories makes sense. Maybe rather than explain all of your theories in the footnotes, expand more of your story with the explanation. To me, you made the theory more grasping than the story. My teacher would have said it like this, "We got a general picture of the ocean, but we don't have the specifics of the island you're living in." What that means is you made the story vague by making the footnotes more important which is what we don't see until the end. I hope this helps in some way. Very good work. Would love to see more.