|Reviews for Show Biz|
| flawsinthisworld chapter 1 . 10/10/2017
I love this but I hate this! XD
Doin Alfred like this!
| sasunaru13 chapter 1 . 10/5/2015
| Tamagoakura chapter 1 . 1/2/2013
Hahahaha, oh my god. I hadn't expected that, how rude.
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/28/2012
This was NICE. And HOT. I hope there's more! :D
| Devious Destitute Denouement chapter 1 . 12/28/2012
" he asked as he fully undid his pants, revealing a raging boner."
Forgive me if I say that that part was a little...mood-breaking. The 'raging boner' bit didn't exactly fit in. It was a good laugh, I'll admit, but it felt a little misplaced, diction wise.
The sex scene was a little rushed- I couldn't believe that it was over in just one paragraph!
But overall I do like it- especially the little twist where Ivan totally denied him the part, and called it part of "show-biz." A little dark- and especially when Alfred said he even liked the feeling, I enjoyed that very much. it foreshadows what he might be doing later c;
Overall I enjoyed it, though you could have rounded it off a little- of course I know it's a gift and those sorts of things are usually rushed. But I'm glad you wrote and posted it! I enjoyed myself through the read.