|Reviews for Unbridled Expectations|
| Guest chapter 28 . 6/3
It’s been a while, but PLEASE MAKE MORE!
| xBowiegirlx chapter 25 . 5/12
I wish you would update
| Ryanne 187 chapter 1 . 3/26
This is the problem with these good stories...theyre usually written by people who just fo screw it and stop. What a waste.
| razeejm24 chapter 2 . 3/23
I’ve reread this story three times because a it so good. I hope you continue
| Jetredgirl chapter 25 . 1/12
I reread this because I loved it so much. I do hope all is well with you and you may someday return to continue. Naysayers be damned :)
| razeejm24 chapter 1 . 11/11/2017
Please continue the story, it’s so good
| razeejm24 chapter 1 . 10/23/2017
I love this story it is amazing!
| PixiedustWishes chapter 28 . 8/15/2017
I just found this story and it pulled me in! I hope you continue this story!
| TheThinWhiteDuchess chapter 28 . 8/15/2017
Please continue! I'm hanging on the edge here lol
| Guest chapter 14 . 7/18/2017
Wow. This was an awful story. You completely turned Sarah into a submission little is so not like her character at all. One of the worst stories I've ever seen.I feel like you relflected your personality into this obedient character.
| redkatt1979nh chapter 28 . 5/26/2017
Love the story. I can't wait to see what happens to j and s. Keep up the great work
| GrowingThroughTheCracks chapter 28 . 12/3/2016
I really appreciate how developed you've made Valentine. As selfish as she is, I can see why she doesn't like Sarah. Valentine's been in love with Jareth for decades and suddenly Sarah comes along and it's over. I do feel kind of bad for her. You really avoided making Valentine a flat character. Well done. Hope you update soon!
| Guest chapter 28 . 9/22/2016
Finish what you start.
| croberts98 chapter 28 . 8/10/2016
Wait, what? I'm so confused. Is Rumpelstiltskin Ardeth? Is he Roman? or is he new Jareth, the one that came back? Is that why Jareth was being weird, like smoking and stuff? Ahhhh!
| Vampiyaa chapter 28 . 8/6/2016
Hello there! I enjoyed this story very much :) However I wouldn't be a very good reader/reviewer/fellow writer if I didn't offer a bit of constructive criticism. As you said the story is about a slow burn instead of a rush to completion-which is fine, but you tend to spend more time focusing on things that are less important to the plot. Sarah and Jareth's relationship issues, especially the squabbling between her and Valentine, are put as priority constantly, when sometimes it needs to be set aside for something more important. It tends to make you forget other plot threads you've set up for yourself, like the Welcoming Ball Sarah was suppose to plan, presenting the new Queen, Roman's lessons (which we saw nothing of. We should be seeing what happens in these lessons and how they affect our protagonist, not watching from an outsider's POV), the fact that Sarah is Queen now and yet has had no duties for a year (beyond the one time she stepped in to hold Council while Jareth was away). From your A/Ns I get the sense you write on the fly, making stuff up as you go. You should try to plan out all of your chapters with even the vaguest detail, so you know where you're going and have a reference for what you wrote in the past.
I love the fact that my darling Rumple is here! But his presence makes it a crossover of sorts now, and while his character is awesome, he's not really needed, since Roman's already the one doing all the evil plotting.
These are just a few things I noticed and figured I'd point out :) but other than that, I really did like this story. I know it's been a while since the last chap and I bet RL kidnapped you, the sneaky jerk, but I do hope you update soon!