|Reviews for Conviction|
| HermioneGirl96 chapter 1 . 1/18
"I and your mum"? Quite sweet aside from that grammar issue.
| Black.Widow26 chapter 1 . 8/7/2014
You had me moved to tears with the words you used to convey both James affection for Harry and his mum. I loved the way you made James serious and joking at the same time. I think you really captured who James was portrayed to be. I loved it!
| opalcat chapter 1 . 5/11/2013
"I would give my today to let you both have a tomorrow."
Plagiarize much? But then your type has always hand waved that sort of thing away.
"(and occasionally gassing)"
Well, you certainly are familiar with fahts as the stink of yours follows you everywhere and leaves a trail a blind person could see and envelopes you in a greenish yellowish brown fog. And what do you know?! Your fahts CAN and DO actually cause paint to peel. Bravo.
It's...oh what's the word...interesting, no, no, NOTHING you have ever or will ever do could be considered interesting or entertaining. Boring and stupid and childish, definitely, but never interesting. Hmmm...it's right there, hard to see through the stink haze-fog of your fahts...*Pulls on triple sealed gloves gropes through Nimbus Llewelyn's personal faht cloud* There it is!
You are a hypocrite.
And before you start fahting and shrieking and soiling your pants YET again today, just stop.
The fact that you declare that it is perfectly all right in fact expected for you to viciously attack and destroy other people's work, but they are only allowed to suck your stinking faht fog covered cock and lavished your stories with endless gushing praise and if they evince even the merest hint of a negative word you rip them to shreds.
That is the very definition of hypocritical.
So, I suppose I can expect a personal reply in kind, right? After all that's what you promised in your bullshit profile message and if you don't then in addition to being a plagiarist and a hypocrite, you will be a liar as well.
Oh. I'd REALLY suggest you schedule an appointment with your doctor about that faht problem. They actually have drugs you can take for that sort of thing these days. Of course it may well be a physical issue with your colon and butthole in which case you may well have to wear a bag for the rest of your life.
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/11/2013
this is ...lovely. Keep up the good work!
| DjinniFires chapter 1 . 2/5/2013
This is a sweet interior monologue of a father regarding his son. The comments fit in well with the character of James and of what we know about his best friends. The sentence fragments work, providing rhythm to the piece. Due to the brevity (304 words per ), there isn't too much more to comment about.
One minor grammar issue: in paragraph 2, sentence 2, the word "to" is missing; should be "Where I could do things to teach you..."
For your own sake, remove "sappy" from your description. The word "sweet" is better, i.e., "This is a sweet one shot in which..."
| aydentheamicable chapter 1 . 1/1/2013
Wow! In a short time; you had me close to tears, smiling and giggling. James could be serious at times, but he was still a Marauder and you conveyed that perfectly. The connection James had both with Lily and Harry shines through here, and I just know James would have been so proud of what his son would eventually become. And in it all, you still managed to sneak some foreshadowing in there too. James did just what he had promised, but I'm sure he would always regret not saving Lily. I'm rambling now though, aren't I? In the end, you managed to pack so much into this beautiful piece and provided a real example as to why quantity and quality don't always go hand in hand. One quick grammar thing though; the cat sentence doesn't sound right and I believe it might just need an extra word or two. But don't take that the wrong way - I still love what you have done here and you can bet your bottom dollar I'll be both favoriting and following you!
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/31/2012
A vere different short story and for it I give you: Five Bronze Stars.
Hope to see more one day soon.
The Crimson Mage.
P.S: Hope you have a Happy New Year !