|Reviews for A Jailer's Disgust|
| persevera chapter 1 . 1/5/2013
I like the repetition of phrases and ideas, such as up and up the stairs and Harold's wondering if Hesper was wearing jacquard silk, like Marvolo.
It's interesting that the prejudice for pureblood matches was so all-encompassing that a sophisticated Black would consider pathetic and cruel Morfin for her spinster daughter.
The parentheses were effective for the most part. I don't understand this one. [ (Why doesn't she listen when I announce her engagement?)]
Also the last one doesn't seem to be necessary, as it was just a descriptor for the previous phrase and only needed a comma.
Interesting to make it from the POV of the jailer who had to tolerate Marvolo. I like that.
| DaniHP chapter 1 . 1/2/2013
Your story is very ineresting, I really liked it. I don't think it was that funny, as Draco-Hermy said but it makes people enjoy the reading. It made me a little confused sometimes but that's what made it more interesting for me and I liked reading your story
| Draco-Hermy chapter 1 . 1/1/2013
This was quite interesting. When I saw which prompts you'd picked, I figured you'd make the story about Marvolo's interaction with Tom Riddle Sr. But you completely blew me away with something I'd never expect! And your writing is much better than most on this website. I don't think it was funny in the way of laughing, but repetition and a few other things made for really enjoyable story. I like it!