|Reviews for A Phoenix's Heart|
| Raibu-Shinu chapter 1 . 9/17/2013
Ok That made me cry a little bit there wasn't much but just enough to make you cry! Good job on the story
| LuffyGirl chapter 1 . 7/15/2013
Wow, this was good! I almost cried at the end. D':
| Terikel chapter 1 . 1/13/2013
I'm really sorry for replying this late (I blame that new game I got for Christmas), but I reeeeeeeally enjoyed this story, as always. I liked how you wrote Marco, Ace and Thatch, and that they all had their appearance, since they totally are my favourite characters (plus Law, of course). And I love the idea of Namida being kidnapped and the Whitebeards being so nice and saving her and bringing her back. 3 Also Marco 3
Uhm, enough fangirling. xD
I wouldn't mind if you'd expend this story some more, of course, but since I already bothered you into writing more Law, I won't be too pushy and just happy for this wonderful present. :)
Now, the beginning was a bit fast, I think. You write that there hadn't been any pirates in years, and the next sentence she spots a Jolly Roger. Maybe just change it that it's a really peaceful island. :)
Btw, I love the name of the island. So fitting. :)
I loved the two devifruits you invented and I would have loved to see them more in action; the battle between them sounded great. But I guess that's impossible from Namidas POV. xD
And I'm curious what happened in the 3 days she spent with the Parrot pirates, and if Captain Morgan maybe had some kind of wounds form their fight?
I love the idea of him using her as a shield, knowing that Whitebeard is to nice to attack hostages. 3 And Marco. 3 *Ahem*
I also loved how you wrote Whitebeard had a nice aura, that's how I see him, too. Namida seemed a bit confused, though. First she thinks they are nice and will bring her home, then she thinks pirates are bad, then she hopes they won't be mean. But I guess I'd be a bit confusing after such a rescue, too. xD
I absolutely loved the interaction between Namida, Ace and Marco. Ace being all formal, Marco comforting her (I looooover hurt/comfort, seriously), then Ace being cheesy, Marco teasing him. 3
I would have liked to read more about how she gets used to life on the ship, in the few days you skipped, but I guess then it wouldn't be a oneshot anymore. *g* But her first meeting with Thatch seems like it could have been quite interesting. xD
And I love protective, jealous Marco. 3 And shy Namida, she sure doesn't have it easy. I laughed at her thinking she looked like a tomato. xD
Her realisation that she's fallen for Marco came a bit fast, but that's life, I guess. He's her savior after all, seems legit. And I like your explanation that she needs his guidance in life, and that he's authorative. 3
Would have loved to see even more interaction, but again, it's (still? :P) a oneshot. *g*
I'm ust a bit confudes about her spending a whole month on the Mobby Dick. The Parrot pirates had her for 3 days, and even with the detour they took to stock up their supplies, it seems improbable that they would need a month to return. Maybe make her spend more time with the Parrots? :)
The ending was soooo sad. I always get depressed hearing about the death of all my favourite characters. :( Nut at least they can comfort each other now. :)
I loved that Marco sneaked into her bed during the night. xD Maybe you could have expended on that a bit more? Like she wakes up and wonders about the arm pinning her to the bed and turning into a tomato again? xD
I also wonder where Dreah went. I'm not sure why, but I kinda liked her (maybe because of her ability? Awesome xD).
I love how they finally kiss and that Marco is going to stay with her at least some more time. :)
Thank you veeeeeeeery much for this wonderful present, it really made my day. I adore Marco, and Ace and Thatch, and Namida was great and I loved it. :)
| Shellbell-san chapter 1 . 1/11/2013
D'awww! So cute! You're right; you did finish it nicely. I just love One Piece! I could read it all day! And I'm open to any pairing, really, but not so much yaoi pairings. That's why I love what you've done with One Piece!
| Zabu chapter 1 . 1/3/2013
Nice story. I enjoyed it.
| xXxWolvesInTheNightxXx chapter 1 . 1/1/2013
I really enjoyed this! :)