I would suggest ideas but I have none it's already on the right track

wow! keep going!

I like the story idea, but-and don't take this the wrong way-the execution is pretty chopped.

First is the formatting is very hard to read. This might not even be your fault because has some quirks in how they process documents, but do try to hit enter twice to get a proper space between paragraphs.

Also, start a new paragraph for each new thought or whenever a new person is speaking.

I'd really have liked to have seen more description here too. I'm not a fan of huge walls of description, but I did have a bit of trouble figuring out where Paulina was once she reached Vlad's house. Did she go into the lab? Into the Ghost Zone? It's not really clear.

I hope you don't take this as a flame, I do like the idea you have here, I'd just like it to be a bit easier to read and follow.

Keep writing though; what you've got in mind seems interesting.

You should continue. Enough said ;)

wow! keep going!

Yes continue! I love this concept, and I can't wait to see how it progresses:)

Ah, so Desiree DOES have a heart. Interesting... xD Update? :P

determint is not a word. i believe the word you were looking for is "determined".
your summary seemed intriguing. this is really short so far. i'm hoping to see an update soon!
it would be great if one of these was one where paulina and danny end up together. if it is, then i'll follow for more. please PM me, thanks.
and good job!

poor Sam