Reviews for Muv-Luv Alternative New Beginning
Banana chapter 9 . 6/16/2014
I think your story is pretty nice. I was really happy when I saw your fic, that I see as a continuation of MuvLuv Alternative. Ahaa, I had wanted him to spend a whole day with each of his harem, but that would take to much time. I really love Meiya and Ayamine. They really are the best in my eyes. And your story is pretty loyal to the visual novel, in my eye. Save for that mystery character, Saeko.

I enjoyed it a lot and I would pray for you to someday update another chapter...
Guest chapter 9 . 5/24/2014
are you still on hiatus?
its good story, i hope you continue it
Sonicfanx1 chapter 1 . 1/26/2014
My eyes...GRAHHHHH!
Sonicfanx1 chapter 2 . 12/1/2013
Your manner of speech is irritating. It's hard to read and is more suitable for VNs not FanFics. I recommend you come back and do proper paragraphs later.
jakss chapter 9 . 12/1/2013
When is the next update? have you stop this story? It's a pity.
kazekitsune666 chapter 1 . 11/18/2013
Script format... Sorry cant read.
Ressan chapter 9 . 5/27/2013
Nice chapter, cant wait to see how Takeru ends, with all the memories relived and remembered and how much impact he can have on the Beta infested world.
Ressan chapter 2 . 5/27/2013
Nice chapt.
Ressan chapter 1 . 5/27/2013
Seems interesting.
kaazmiz chapter 9 . 5/20/2013
Im interested in reading more as it gives of an interesting vibe, alough it feels like the emotional roler coaster is taking too long. And a whole week of this before he leaves... seems too long ( writing after reading 9 chaps in one go). But you are the author so lets see where you take us with it.

I have high hopes for this considering the length an contents so far.
Good luck
Ruvian chapter 9 . 5/19/2013
To much flash make this retard story...
superior-chan chapter 1 . 5/13/2013
great update!
Yaaarrr chapter 9 . 5/10/2013
Great chapter, your story flow was smooth like always, tho it was a bit worse at the fist fight. The whole point of action parts is to make the flow faster and let the details be filled by ones imagination. No need to spend 2 lines on a punch :D. But other than that it was nice. Loved the forshadowing, tho now i want more chapters :S. Anyway keep up the good work!
P4Nd0RaS chapter 9 . 5/10/2013
Not a bad chapter... i guess
It probably trolled everyone reading including me...

Well, keep doing the good job.
nad destroyer chapter 9 . 5/10/2013
Holy crap an entire chapter based entirely off of flashbacks lol. Guess your prologue is going to be a few chapters longer than you originally estimated lol. Woohoo! My first mention on fanfic by an author :P.

No wonder this chapter update took so long. The detail you put into the fight scene with the soldiers looked damn professional. There is actually one or two spots you actually had a bit too much detail but whatever I really enjoyed it. And I like at the end of the fight scene that poor corporal that had his head removed by the Beta in Alternative gets a special mention. I always wanted him to have one or two more scenes with Shirogane but it never happened. Oh yea... a minor grammatical error that caught my attention for some reason. I usually don't pay attention to that stuff anymore since I started reading fanfics.

"Then,the Corporal and I are made jostling in the muddy stream of people " It should be: Then, the corporal and I are jostled in the muddy stream of people. Again don't know why that caught my attention.

It seems that your Hayase and huuduc's Hayase are going to have similar character developement as she "seems strong" but is really weak on the inside. I really summarized that though.

And finally a proper sequential explanation if incomplete of why more memories than what Shirogane should have is plaguing him. PaulXion never did offer an explanation yet I'm still assuming he's getting to it. But if your reasoning is applied to his story then some things make a bit more sense. Its kinda funny though almost all of this info was in Alternative but I could never bring myself to reread it again fully so I never put this stuff together.

And I reached the end of the chapter. When what you read makes you want to read more you know it was a good chapter. Why there isn't more reviewers posting I'll never know...
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