Reviews for One Night Stand
Useful76 chapter 16 . 1/23/2013
It was a nice story. I like how you had them gradually grow together instead of just falling madly in love once she became pregnant. More detail on their relationship and it's growth would have been nice but it wasn't needed for the overall plot.

Nice work.
Useful76 chapter 15 . 1/23/2013
Threat instead of treat.
Sense instead of since.
three instead of tree.
discuss instead of disgusted
knew instead of new.
Kurenai instead of Kureina
Ten Ten instead of Tin Tin (which I saw you corrected)
Straight instead of strait

Simple stuff that could be fixed with some proofreading. some of them don't make a difference but others make a lot of difference. Takes away from the story when there are too many. Just some advice.
Useful76 chapter 9 . 1/23/2013
It's a good little story so far. You definitely need to proof read it though. Simple spelling errors turn entire sentences on their heads.

"She knew that Sasuke was a treat."

Big difference between treat and threat.

Other than that, it's going pretty good. I would have liked to have seen more reaction from their friends but it didn't take away from the story.
Nana Amatte chapter 16 . 1/16/2013
Awwwnn, this end is so cute and fun :3 So sad that ended but really happy that is going be a prequel :) I was so sad for Sasuke‘s death, was truly painful and got me blue ç.ç I‘m really liked Kurama and Kushina, both names and personalities :] Hoping for the adventures of Kushina and Naruto and Sakura scenes xD
Nos482reborn chapter 16 . 1/11/2013
nice ending look forward to the sequel
kidloco chapter 16 . 1/11/2013
oh lol the las part and lvoe it the fanfic, and will read the sequel :D and yay, more lemons and not pears or cherrys? or mango mmmm mango is rico... XD

sorry bad joke bad joke XD
Fairy of Sakuras chapter 16 . 1/11/2013
That was so good... I felt tears sting my eyes when Sasuke died... Never expected Sasuke to have a kid, that totally surpised me.
Shawn2012 chapter 15 . 1/10/2013
I haven't red for the past 5 chapters but wow you have done an outstanding job. What is the child's last name going to be Uzumaki? Namikaze? Or haruno? Will naruto and sakura get together? I just think you have outdone yourself in the story :)
Fairy of Sakuras chapter 15 . 1/10/2013
Please kill Sasuke...I hope Sakura is alright please say she is...I love how it differs just a little from Kishimoto-sensei but it just the right amount...
scorpio from outer space chapter 15 . 1/10/2013
you updated faster than i thought!
i love that...
great development of the story, making it more interesting.
Zatheko chapter 14 . 1/10/2013
This story is great! Love the fast updates, look forward to more!
dbzsotrum9 chapter 14 . 1/10/2013
Asuma and Kurenai's kid is a girl (from what Kishi said, not actually shown in the manga)

and how old are Naruto and Sakura? are they in their 20's?
Zeeman chapter 14 . 1/10/2013
The name of Neji's and Rock Lee's teammate is Tenten. Just so you can change it.
I had mixed emotions while reading the chapter. Happiness about the baby and sadness nearing the end but it was very nice, as usual.
Keep going, this fic is really good. Thank you
Fairy of Sakuras chapter 14 . 1/10/2013
I must say Neji has the worst luck...I really hope Sasuke dies and Naruto gets to be there for his daughter. Him and Sakura would make great parents...good enough to revival Minato and Kushina
Nos482reborn chapter 13 . 1/10/2013
Interesting.. and intriguing
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