|Reviews for The Rookie Chronicles 2: Black Ops Rising|
| Noble noisii chapter 4 . 1/5
Why is it T rating?
| Commissar Critical chapter 41 . 12/1/2013
Fuckin' A man. I wish you had updated this one, but I'm sure I'll like the new stories. Thanks for letting your loyal fans know the battleplan.
Commissar Critical, formerly The Critical One
| ghostleon chapter 41 . 12/1/2013
I can't wait to see your new work, even if its under a new profile. Also its good to see your back, i hope your writing career has gone well during your hiatus. I'll be watching for your new stuff.
As always your hunble reader/reviewer,
| deafarcher chapter 41 . 12/1/2013
Well I totally didn't see this coming :D
But seriously man do whatever makes you happy... it seams recently youv just got ambitious... its not your thing... originally you just rolled with it from one story to the next and we loved them all... now you seem like your restricting yourself
| Innoxious chapter 40 . 7/14/2013
"He watched the proceedings begin to wrap up. ... ... ONI had chosen to go public with the Survivors, but that's only because Trent knew they were shutting the program down" should read "Blake knew.." since trent is currently being buried.
| Innoxious chapter 35 . 7/13/2013
Just another example..."Trent rolled as he hit the ground, swinging his shotgun around and blocking away the awful mask of sickly white horror that the Creeper atop him wore. " probably should be "blasting away..."
"They reached the extraction zone and hustled into the Pelican. Trent knew that there were too many onboard, but the back ramp began closing anyway and the Pelican took off." Too many what? People on the pelican to take off? how did they take off anyway if there were too many people? did they leave kick people off or what?
Maybe i'm reading too much into this or misremembering, but if Childs said they recently 'torn away' from searching for eric/trent/thorne, then why did melissa/blake think he was dead and get together only a couple weeks after the incident?
I know the amount of criticism in my reviews far outweigh the praise, but don't let that fool you. I really do enjoy this story or i obviously wouldn't be reading it...
| Innoxious chapter 33 . 7/13/2013
"Finally, Jennifer stood up.
"Fine, whatever. I'm going to go get ready." She left. Slowly, the others rose and began to file out. Before he could leave, Trent asked Nauls,"
So I'm either really confused or you're doing the melissa/jennifer switch thing again... Also, i know this is a sequel, but you need to expand on how you reintroduce characters, or put more of their back-story in, or something similar. It's been kinda difficult remembering all the characters especially when they haven't been 'heard' from in a while and you only introduce them by their name, and sometimes only a first or last name which wasn't what they were usually called during.
| Innoxious chapter 29 . 7/13/2013
I've noticed a lot more spelling/grammar errors recently, as if you are relying to much on spell check instead of a good beta reader. Things like 'way' instead of 'wave' or a switching up names like when Jennifer and Melissa first met. Also a few things were incongruous like "Trent ... his battle rifle. He saw sprays of blood..." where Trent gave his BR to Jorge earlier.
I really enjoy the plot/story and the way you handle the crossover part, although it would be nice if you could list them or annotate them someone. While im pretty sure i have recognized all of them, it would be nice to know for sure i didnt miss any.
Anyway, keep up the good work, and i will probably go end up reading this again where i will leave my reviews more frequently so you know exactly which chapter im talking about...
| Razor V chapter 40 . 6/19/2013
As much as I hated the fact that you killed Trent and Enzo, I feel that it was justified and the only real way of ending this magnificent series. I have to say I was close to tears when I read that they died, but yet at the same time it was so beautiful, the way they died and the power behind the words were just hypnotizing. Bravo on a fantastic series and may the pen continue to write.
| Nobel Six chapter 40 . 6/19/2013
| Splittah chapter 40 . 6/17/2013
Well. Another story come to an end. I'll miss Trent. Yet looking forward to Yellow jackets. You finished off the story well. The repetitiveness didn't bother me at all. Because each mission was extremely different and was a building up the final fight. A twist it was.
| cv snowblind chapter 40 . 6/16/2013
Dammit. wait was it open an open or closed casket burial. anyway if they died it kinda kills a good story, but im not complaining it was awesome while it lasted and if there is some random plot twist with undeath or something blackops left behind i would not be suprised to see him brought back somehow like jason vorhees damm immortality.
| AvatarRanger51 chapter 37 . 6/16/2013
Sorry i have to review this chapter. my review for forty posted prematurely.
Wow. You mentioned me in your blog! I'm touched.
So after reading your blog, I found out that some of the things that you said bothered you, bothered me too. For a while there it was just like. The survivors get a mission. They go to said mission. Something goes horribly wrong. Trent lets out a string of cuss words. Trent fucks Jennifer and gets high after the mission.
It did get a little boring.
And another thing you were right on about. Trent did seem invincible. So I thought killing him was a good ending. I'm quite excited about Yellowjackets too.
And I have a burning question that I've been wanting to ask you for a while. In chapter 28 of THE ROOKIE CHRONICLES, it mentions a lieutenant commander Bennings. What ever happened to him?
| AvatarRanger51 chapter 40 . 6/16/2013
Wow. You mentioned me in your bl
| Guest chapter 40 . 6/16/2013
YOU KILLED HIM! NOOOO