Great story. Love all the changes and can not wait to see what happens in book two.

I'm psychic, so I swear on the Styx that I have not read the rest of this story, but I have decided that an Olympian God will die in Chapter 9

Lmao what, the Fates hold no power over Chaos, and no laws bind him. If the fates planned something that Chaos doesn't want to happen he can easily stop it, he is Chaos. The ancient laws don’t apply to him. And the fates speaking to Chaos like that is beyond crazy. The power balance is all out of wack. All the Gods of Olympus rivaling Chaos’ power is a complete insult to his actual power. This man could flick his finger and everyone and everything on or related to Earth would die.

Just to tell you chaos isn’t effected by the ancient law. They are above the law. They are the one who punishes the people or god that break the ancient law.
( please don’t take this badly I’m not trying to be mean or anything)

bro is that rly fuckin all bro this shit was fire till this nigga screwed everything up i swear to motherfuckin god niggaa

dude u actual fucking nigga i swear this shit is hella fire ngl

nigga this shit fire as hell

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Grammar is a bit weird, feels stilted in some places. Some spelling mistakes. Plot is good though, so I’ll keep reading. Maybe break some of those giant paragraphs into chunks for easier reading? I like that you properly separated the talking into their own paragraphs though.

This is an interesting idea. The first half of the chapter, Percy comes off as whiny and entitled, ‘Boohoo, no one pays attention to me and my girl left me for another guy so I’m running away.’ The second half of the chapter was a bit of a gut punch. Well done.

guys this is a literal fanfiction. FAN FICTION. Not everything needs to be tailored to the books maybe these twists have an important part to play l8er. Chill

Who the hell does the fates think they are!? They have no right to order the literal maker of the entier universe. No reality itself around.

What does Percy have to gain from making himself a suspect to poisoning Thalias tree?! He shouldve stayed long enough go tell everyone tjat it was luke before leaving!

He killed annabeth..?

Omg. Your really making waves percy