|Reviews for Rise of the Whirlpool|
| Aedwards179 chapter 1 . 4/15
I know the concept behind these but it always amazes me how the authors always give the civilian council a say In Shinobi matters. that'd be like a restaurant owner having a say in military operations
| darkNarutoo chapter 1 . 2/14
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/29/2021
Name one Jutsu that Kakashi taught Sasuke other than the Chidori?
| Luna.Uchimaki2008 chapter 1 . 12/29/2021
Nicht story. I really like it
| TITO Skeleton chapter 9 . 12/26/2021
Well it is obvious that you changed your view point on something as it reflects on this chapter. Everything was fine until you wrote without remembering what you had written before causing this chapter to be all over the place... it was nice and you can write good I'll give you that but this chapter just pushed me away.
| Danirodriguez1995 chapter 9 . 9/25/2021
Please continue, the story is very good, Please don't give up, a story that the truth has no comparison. I can tell you since I am a huge fan of this type of story and the truth is they have no comparison.
| god eater chapter 1 . 1/29/2021
i like the concept of the story but you have to work on your dialogues it:s its made by machines and has no transitions whatsoever. also kazuki telling naruto his life story like that is kinda cringe isnt he supposed to be a ninja? lol it was a bit weird
| I am a person 123 chapter 5 . 1/11/2021
where did garra get the cookie thing from? a lot of people know about it but i doubt we know where it started
| thegrison chapter 1 . 11/26/2020
It was going most well then you KILLED the story. So NOT have an OC magical show up and be very strong. In most cases it hurts/kills a story. Getting to that level is very hard. There are maybe 20-30 ninja that reach that level and to have and OC t that just happens to pop up and knew his parents is trash. Good luck and it will not be reading anymore of this.
| Yuzuki476 chapter 1 . 11/23/2020
Thank you for making this a naruto story and konoha needs to be burnt to the ground for what they have done.
| VuyolwethuNdlovu chapter 9 . 10/27/2020
Are you dumb or what Mei is way powerful then Itachi
| Guest chapter 9 . 3/17/2020
This chapter makes no sense when he met his dad he was told his heritage before he left with tsunade and jiraiya and reads the letters from kushina and minato yet and reads his fathers journal in the previous chapter...but when he gets in the seal and meets minato he doesn’t know he is his father after knowing about him for 8 years that makes no sense at all
| eragon95159 chapter 9 . 1/6/2020
Continue and update please soon.
| Akuma no Hono chapter 1 . 12/24/2019
The story was actually pretty good.
Love what you did for Sasuke though, but I honestly would have thought he would have found out about the real reason behind the massacre. Considering they gave him access to everything.
But honestly I am displeased with certain things.
1) I honestly don't think an Earthquake can take out the Uzumaki. Considering the Uzumaki was a powerful clan, and I like to imagine that even the civilians would have been trained in some form of defence and combat.
2) What you did with the Konoha 10 or what ever number it's down too was kinda overboard. Well with Kiba and Ino I get. And a waste of resources and man power, and honestly cruel. They wouldn't blantly give away Naruto.
3) Honestly what you planned and did with Jiraya was, in my honest opinion dumb as fuck. It made no sense at all, and doing that with the toads was stupid too. That "plot twist" Was and is unnecessary.
4) What you planned with Naruto's seal and him dying at 21 because the seal was faulty was dumb too. And how the meeting with Minato went was confusing and dumb as well.
5) Honestly what you did with Orochimaru was lame and basically gave him Madaras role is the whole thing. It just kinda started spirailing and got hella confusing and just plain meh around chapters 8 and 9.
Like you didn't know what to do with story.
I like the concept and the "plot" But you bombed it with some people and there roles.
| marquis.shax chapter 1 . 7/23/2019
hahahhahah wow really an EARTHQUAKE is the best you could come up with? Lmao a whole fucking village filled with NINJA who use their CHAKRA TO MANIPULATE THE ELEMENTS and a whole bunch of seal masters done in by an EARTHQUAKE? Wow I know this story has been abandoned for 6 years but still that's gotta be THE ABSOLUTE WORST reason I've EVER read in any of these old stories for the downfall of Uzu at least most say it was one of the other villages or Madara or the Biju that took out the Uzumaki rather than an Earthquake that wouldn't bother ANY of the Villages. Sure it could displace civilians but to a ninja village an Earthquake wouldn't do shit. Honestly this earthquake must've been on the level of the one in that movie San Andreas lmao