|Reviews for Seeds of Panem|
| Gamemaker John chapter 1 . 1/3
Awesome intro! I can't wait to read more.
| T.j.98 chapter 14 . 11/26/2013
A really in depth story, it was as dramatic as it was literarily addictive.
It shows how humanity almost became the tool of its own destruction. It shows how despite the fact that the Mandate was willing to nuke civilian targets (including the holy city of a major world religion), the last world war was a case of Dark Grey vs. Oblivion Black morality. While the UAF and allies evacuated Korea and protected japan, they also nuked major Mandate cities and lynched refuges.
Especially touching was how the UAF soldiers who temporarily survived the neutron bomb, knowing the,radiation would kill them in a few days, made it their suicide mission to not only take down as many enemy's as possible, but to buy the evacuation some time. This was one of two moments where humanity's inherent inclination towards good shines through; the other being the President choosing to stay in quarantine with the others.
The Mandate proved sore losers, using all 8000 nukes to bring down their enemies in a last ditch effort. The retaliation of the others meant that an ice age ravaged the weakened earth, leaving only losers in that conflict.
But no matter where I read it, it's always an especially sad theme when humanity falls from a past grandeur of which it has yet to recover. (Or in especially depressing cases, can never recover.) It may be possibly based on real life, as human civilization as a whole tends to follow a cycle of birth, growth, grandeur, decline, death, and eventual rebirth.
All in all, this is one of your best (so far). It manages to take a history lecture and dramatize and explore deep thoughts on human nature and its follies. Keep writing stories, your talent is without question. I will continue to read your unfinished stories as you update them.
| Belle453 chapter 14 . 9/15/2013
Thanks for this nice summary. As we discussed before - I had the districts laid out a little different in my head, but I can see why you have them where you do. I think your reasoning is sound and makes sense.
Thanks again for writing such a nice piece. I appreciate all your hard work and research that went into this piece. I'm thoroughly impressed - from one STEM to another...;)
| Belle453 chapter 13 . 9/15/2013
Ok then...! Wow! Very interesting and I love your take on Snow and how "he" came into power and the symbolism of the name behind every ruler henceforth.
It's also very interesting to see your ideas on the other civilizations...they're out there and possibly even in touch with Snow (our Snow...;)) - but, he'll never let anyone know anything about those civilizations or those communications.
Excellent read...thank you very much for writing such a unique story full of so much horrifying details. I love it.
| Belle453 chapter 12 . 9/15/2013
UGH...I'm not surprised to see the natural disasters settle in after everything humans did to destroy each other. We're seriously headed on that track if we don't do something to change our ways. We're not taking care of Earth along the way...so, ladies and gentlemen, unless we change our path...!
Messed up, indeed!
Have to say that I'm with Dio. I'd love to go on an excavation trip - I don't really have the stomach for much, but like he said...more statuesque than grotesque.
I'm really looking forward to seeing how everything gets organized into districts and even more, looking forward to seeing if you mention anything about civilizations in other areas surviving since the books don't mention anything. For all we know, the residents of Panem are the only survivors on Earth.
| Belle453 chapter 11 . 9/15/2013
Well...I'm so happy I decided to read this chapter before going to bed...:(.
Damn, it's depressing and horrifying. After reading it I can picture something like this happening...but where do you come up with it in the first place?
I'm so glad Dio looked away...scary and gross!
| Belle453 chapter 10 . 9/12/2013
12-13? Sickening! But...yeah...I can still imagine it happening...haven't read anything yet that's so way out there...though I keep thinking I'd rather be telling you your story's so way out there that there's nothing to relate to...but it too realistic and hits too close to home to what's already happening. Love Cocked Pistol and Mandate Mike.
Senseless is right! Oil pumps attacked too...ugh!
Huh... Is it just me, or are his pupils slightly dilated? - okay, what is going on here?
| Belle453 chapter 9 . 9/12/2013
Love the dialog between the boys. I'm a mechanical engineer so mostly I enjoy the technical stuff shown too...;). Just not the guts and bodies and such...ugh!
Now this is being a really good friend: "The hell you apologizing for?" I growl, "If you need to call me out on something, do so. I can take what you dish out."...I love it.
Geez...I knew the explosions in the arena were coming. I could feel you headed in that direction. The biological agent...I admit...I did not see coming. Really? I know...it's not too far-fetched...just scary as hell. Glad Richards stayed behind.
You're not kidding about "more fun stuff coming"...Who are you? And how do you write this stuff?...;)
| Belle453 chapter 8 . 9/12/2013
Ok...so I don't like being right about my guess...ugh! I didn't think about Mecca - should have recognized it from your description (I took a few classes in religion in college...;))...Madina too? Whoever decided to bomb Mecca didn't think through things too clearly...or maybe they did and all still went to hell...not literally.
Ok...so hard/painful to read about all the people who died and about their horrendous deaths. I think I told you before, that the worst part is that I can see us heading towards such a direction. I hope we change course...ugh!
| Belle453 chapter 7 . 9/12/2013
College is supposed to be about drinking and messy room...I think his parents just have to accept that part of it...;).
This: To think that my initial reaction at Dio showing concern would be to formulate a way to tear him down. Over a pen...really made me crack up. It is hilarious!
As if the last chapter wasn't bad enough...ugh...I hate wars! So what's the video at the end...missile attack? What's with the people in the white gowns...are they like jihadists?
Love, love mahogany reference...THAT IS MAHAGONY!...;)
| Belle453 chapter 6 . 9/12/2013
Hell yeah...they are! OMG...everything is just going up in smokes. What the hell? And it's really scary cause the events are starting to morph towards the Hunger Games. UGH!
| Belle453 chapter 5 . 9/3/2013
I'm reading this chapter and watching goosebumps form on my arms...this just sounds like our (earth beings) worst nightmare coming true. Have you thought about sending this story off to scientists and UN officials?
I love this line: While under Snow's rule, the Peacekeepers seemed to desperately try to keep everybody in their respective districts, these nations were desperately trying to keep people out. The irony is hilarious.
Amen...the kids aren't the only ones glad that this period is over...I'm so glad myself that this chapter is over. Ugh it felt so real that it was scary. Love the "Mutt Food" and Panem is taking on physical form in this chapter. UGH...I only have one thought from this: So scary and real!
| Belle453 chapter 4 . 9/3/2013
Love Edwin's entrance and the dialog between the two roommates. I'm really intrigued by Dio's thoughts of what the president told him about Dio. Want to know more. Really love the dialog to break up the facts...;)
Eerie forshadowing of "Snow" by Rev Thomas. Though he seems like a psycho, he's right on about the unions turning on each other and the "progress" from there.
Dr. Vega is starting to resemble Dutch entrepreneur Bas Lansdorp who wants to colonize Mars and is offering one-way tickets to Mars. Have you read about the Mars One project? Also his society is starting to sound like a cross between the societies described in "Matched" and "Divergent" - Read either of those? I love dystopian world stories and it's sad to see that the way our world is moving, one or a combination of those could become a reality.
Ouch! - "No offense, but you are not the type of person we are looking for." Loved this line.
And the idea of the 13 districts is born...;). Loved this chapter - my fav so far.
| Belle453 chapter 3 . 8/26/2013
Everything you've written is so plausible that it's downright chilling to the core.
After the last chapter Dio deserved to get laid...;). Happy he had a good time at bday party. Poor guy. The Olympics and the Hunger Games...there's a huge gap between the two...what they represented and their purpose. Loved your explanations/history of the different unions. Again, scary, but we're headed in a similar direction if we don't change our ways soon.
I'm not sure Eurasian sounds any better than USSR because frankly it's not about a good/evil leader or people of the union...it's about one union/nation having too much power. Eurasian would do exactly that...yikes. I like Jen - loved her quit/return on TV...hilarious...something I'd expect from Stephen Colbert...;).
Hoverboards sound awesome. Where's Beetee...I think we could convince him or his grandson to make one? I'd like one; think they'd be a lot of fun.
| Fanfic Allergy chapter 14 . 6/30/2013
This was interesting. I'm going to be honest and critical. This does not mean I didn't enjoy the fic. I did. But you asked for thoughts and you're going to get them.
I don't agree with all of the conjecture about the climatological shifts, but that's the beauty of climate change it's open to vastly different opinions because it is so volatile. I see hints of the Toba catastrophe theory in your fic, and it's something I also agree with.
I place the districts a little differently than you, but that has more to do with where I know geologic features are than anything. But your rationale makes sense for all of your placements and really that's the important part. You need to be able to defend your theories, which you do. And you defend them better than many of the supposed maps I've seen. Seriously, I get ranty.
From a story telling perspective, parts of this were a little dry and infodumping. Part of it has to do with the framework of a college class which is just that, but I'd have liked to have seen more interaction outside of the classroom as well as some of the students conjectures about just what they'd seen. My favorite parts were Ned's attitude about the various horrors he'd seen and Dio's characterization. I like Dio. I also liked the Q&A, it alleviated the dryness.
As for the historical and cultural escalations, what you presented was well researched and based in historical and cultural context. I could see the logical progression. And unfortunately stereotypes do exist for a reason and when faced with adversity the worst part of human behavior becomes apparent, unfortunately.
Your explanation of the various time capsules of information was well thought out. It explains the advanced nature of Panem.
This was an interesting and well researched story. I don't agree with all of the conclusions you presented, but that doesn't detract from the story.