Reviews for Hollow
WalkingInTalaria chapter 1 . 5/12/2015
That was so sad! I've always liked Turin's story in a strange way, and this poem gave me another reason to like it even more.
Valandil chapter 1 . 11/22/2014
Line 2, Stanza 1, Turambar incorrectly spelled.
Loved the overall effect!
LightAsunder chapter 1 . 9/28/2014
Line 2, Stanza 1, Turambar misspelled.
Excellent work!
VoN chapter 1 . 6/9/2014
Excellent work, although there is a typo in stanza one, line three - Harsh the is lightning, I presume the the and the is should be swapped.
Guest chapter 1 . 10/21/2013
You really captured Turin's emotions and what was happening!
Great job!

- Valandil of Nargothrond
Alleilin chapter 1 . 6/6/2013
Wow. That was one of the most fantastic pieces of poetry I have ever read. But of course it made me cry...

The last stanza is truly gorgeous.

"They say he was broken; dead winter reigned;
Reforged yet hollow, for something remained,
A shard of his heart that none shall now save,
Buried with Beleg in that shallow grave."

Wow. Just wow.
Mornen chapter 1 . 1/19/2013
Ah, very dramatic.

My favourite stanza has to be:

"Swifter than silence, the elf's heartbeat fades;
Blood stains his fingers; a thousand dark shades
Of murder, betrayal, sorrow and pain,
Drip down his fingers, as steady as rain."

Comparing the emotions to the rain like that was very effective.

And I also loved the last stanza. "A shard of his heart that none shall now save" - there's some nice alliteration going on there.

Thanks so much for writing this. :)
CrackinAndProudOfIt chapter 1 . 1/17/2013
That was lovely, Celt! It was eloquent (as is all of your work :) and very expressive; your word choice and the overall tone it created fit the title very well-and the poem's title fit the scene it describes flawlessly in its turn.

Great work! :)
-Crackers
LornaWinters chapter 1 . 1/15/2013
Beautiful! Thanks for writing!