Reviews for Break Down (A NaruHina story)
reklaw17 chapter 5 . 10/19/2016
This is awesome dude just need to complete it
AlphaMike369 chapter 17 . 9/29/2016
Um, I have to say, they forgave Sakura way too easily.
CorruptedSoul72 chapter 2 . 5/3/2016
Wtf, he declares he will get stronger to defeat pain and then he tries to kill himself? Plothole much?
guest chapter 36 . 4/15/2016
And yet you write boring crap like NH. Kill yourself.
GamerX chapter 36 . 2/29/2016
Awesome...all emotional and aspiring...please don't make naruto join the akatsuki...
guest chapter 34 . 2/15/2016
Kill yourself, virgin fag.
Teimar2 chapter 36 . 2/2/2016
Man, i really like your stories if its the akame ga kill one or the naruto x hinata one, they are just awesome. I dont even know if you'll see this but could you tell me if youre gonna make the sequel and if yes when because i really like your stories. Sorry bad english
Guest chapter 36 . 2/2/2016
I have read allot of stories from many different authors on here and this has got to be one of the best naruto fanfic I have read. I love the story it is original yet it ties into the main cannon which gives it a what if feel. I also like how you had the Garra and Sakurra paring that is original. I like how you made kiba into a bad guy as well and actually joining the akatski that's good. I really hope to continue reading with the prequel and sequel you talked about. So keep writing and good job
NarHina chapter 36 . 1/8/2016
Loved the story and was scared you would kill Naruto off I really hope you will have a happy ending and Hinata survives.

I wonder how it will turn out with all the difference from canon but I don't think you will have pain bring them all back.

I hope kiba will die in the most horrible way imaginable, trying to steal Hinata and betraying everyone, that monster.

I enjoyed the beginning more with Naruto and Hinata however I think you forced the romance with Gaara and Sakura a little to much I am sure they could fall in love and quickly but you should of built it more and have Sakura still be after Naruto at first for a bit then have her start to be interested in Gaara after all they are't like Naruto and Hinata who are literately just perfect together.

If you made Sakura a bit more upset about being alone I could see it happening. Also Hinata and Naruto should't have forgive her so easily and make her work for it I know she was upset and did't mean it but she still hurt them both.

I also think you should of shown kiba's point of view you know just to help set up the story and show how he descended in to darkness over time more like starting with dark thoughts when Naruto and Hinata got together and develop it a bit.

Naruto going in to a coma because of poison was forced way to much it would of been better if you had hiashi do something to stop his healing ability instead of forcing by just saying this poison can kill anyone. I mean the whole story is dependent on the fact he had that poison and used it and was way OP you should of made him work for it more by having him do more damage during there fight.

Loved the story sad you have't released the new book yet
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Gearskiller94 chapter 36 . 12/2/2015
Great story, I have reread it at least 4 times now in hope that the sequel will come out some time soon because of the cliff hangar at the end! Can't wait for the sequel, I hope it's coming soon! Great writer and writing as well. Keep it up!
Guest chapter 36 . 11/14/2015
Loved it!:)
yourAverageWritr chapter 2 . 5/28/2015
A little unrealistic, the characters won't react that way. You skewed their personality too much to the point where the reader will cringe. Sorry, but you should really change your perspective of the characters, I mean, shine will not break down in a heavy sobbing facade. It just WONT happen.
RamenDreams18 chapter 32 . 4/1/2015
would love to see a pic of kiba and akamaru in the akastsuki with the robes and stuff
Guest chapter 36 . 3/22/2015
cant wait for the sequel!
Lover Of Naruto-Hinata chapter 17 . 3/20/2015
Gaara in the story what do u think aah, i was about to admire one of my most fav fanfic writer again but this twist in story is not good enough
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