Suspiciously: This is your apology to the elcor for wrecking their planet? Grudgingly: Not bad, author.

Pressly just can't catch a break. And you forgot the second crushed guy, author.

Also at least Saren got caught offguard by Geth recon while doing something logical instead of getting sacrificed for a silly reason. So, improvement!

That's not a good enough reason for Sovereign to sacrifice itself, author. Now there's no Reaper in the galaxy until the others come the long way. It could've easily hit the planet and run off with the exact same result. Letting itself get destroyed is stupid, it goes all in during regular ME is because all Reapers would've arrived immediately if it could activate Citadel. I know you needed to get rid of it somehow but this wasn't the way to go.

Your latest little twist is good though. Very good. There's no way Liara will become badass enough for this without Shep dying.

I hope you'll have good reason for random suicide of Sovereign, author.

This Shepard is an isekai'd highschooler instead of a timetravelling space badass. I'm now certain of this.

Changing the future radically invalidates all of your future knowledge, has this Shepard never seen a timetravel story before? She even warned Sovereign and possibly Harbinger that she knows shit she should have no way of knowing. That's full on dumbfuckery.

Ok, this is rushed as hell, but I’m willing to see where it goes.

Wow, Leng being useful for once.

This is so fucking stupid. She just go back in time and IMMEDIATELY adapts and goes on like nothing happened. Then she declares that she's reliving the same events again? I am sorry, is she a robot? Why do people just believe her? She'll be shipped to some far away mental hospitals. Unrealistic af
Why do people writing do-over fiction have this incessant need to make their characters say that they're from the future? No one will ever truly believe it. It doesn't add anything to the story either.

i was going to comment that the leader of the Blue Suns was not on Omega, before realizing i was actually thinking of Jona Sederis and Eclipse, and you were talking about Vido, heh.

...Liara would absolutely crush Miranda in a biotic battle, let alone Oriana, dude.

...The Asari a softer target than the Alliance? The Asari are THE dominant species in the galaxy. how are they a softer target than the youngest race in Citadel Speace?

the "Groovy" line had me thinking of Ash Williams, not Ted Logan esq. also, you forgot the esquire at the end of his name, dude.

not sure when i'll actually watch the third movie. kind of afraid it won't be that good.

now, why did you have to go and kill jack?

personally, i'm a fan of pairing a female Sheppard with Liara. a Male one, with Miranda.