Aww I was hoping Merida had been listening to Hiccup's speech at the smithy and heard :DD
But this is great too! Omg...Rapunzel is in this?

I was half expecting them to drop the flour, aerosolize it and blow Gobber house up. It's happened before, if you look up grain silo explosions. A great chapter.

You go Hiccup! Win that Highland princess's heart and make her fall in love with you! Same to you Gobber! Way to make your point across. Hopefully that'll bring Astrid down a few pegs.
And I also hope that Fishlegs and Hiccup can make that cake in time...or make it at all. -_-' They should ask Fishlegs mom...she's a baker too. Can't wait for tenext chapter!-Peace Out! ;)

Ahhh! I really enjoyed this chapter, so much angst! :D I'm off to read the next one but as always Finmonster, bravo! ;D

Oh last paragraph! You wrote floor instead of flower! But I don't care if you don't change it, I get too lazy to fix words too. Hehe. :p

Fishlegs and Hiccup... Priceless.
Love Your Work!

You're including Rapunzel in this?! OH YOU ARE JUST FANTASTIC. I love this story with all my heart, :)

Really beautiful start. The characterization is great and in-line (I'm such a stickler about this type of thing too). Merida and Hiccup's interactions are natural as if a squeal was made by the original creators. You've exposed them as humans, not heroes and I really appreciate that type of work. Your writing flows nicely and you have a good mix of dialogue and description. My only suggestion is that maybe lay off a little on description in regards to the characters. Give us a few keys things about them that will distinguish them (I'm mostly referring to the introduction of the characters here) from other characters. Like a stump leg and goofy smile. Or stern gaze and huge beard. The in-depth description of the clothing is tedious and unnecessary. We've all seen the movies after all. Use that to your advantage.

Although it really takes me a long time to read some of the dialogue because you did it mostly phonetically, I appreciate the time it took to pull that together. I think it really adds something great to the characters, too!

I like how you made Mor'du humanoid, too.

I'm interested to see how this birthday bash goes and when/how you'll introduce Toothless and the Witch. Pretty excited. I look forward to future chapters.
Fish

Wow! This a great story - you set down the line of politics very well (the tension is fantastic). I love the little pieces of complexity you add to the plot, like Astrid's father being killed by a highlander.

OH MY GOD RAPUNZEL IS GOING TO MAKE A CAMEO IM SO EXCITED IM GONNA CRY AND POSSIBLY HAVE A STROKE THANK YOU

Oh I love the friendship between fishlegs and hiccup, always thought they must of had that kind of past, for they are not the most tempered or violent of Vikings. and comming togeather now is great for hiccup really needs a pal.
And the tree way crossover interesting, wonder how your tieing in that story.

RAPUNZEL! XD BONUS CROSSOVER! THIS PLEASES ME GREATLY :D

I'm really loving your story! The language however, when they speak is kind of hard to follow. I love that you have kept the language of the people, it's just hard to comprehend it. Not impossible. Just hard.
Anyway, I am now off to rad the other 7 chapters. ;)
CHEERS!
Jeni

Wow Hiccup snaping very good man very good!

A great chapter, I love that we see Hiccup stand up for himself and attack Snotlout and Tuffnut, I just wish he could have hit more of Snotlout face with the hammer, and and great job having Hiccup call out Gobber on his harsh words, I under he never said them to be cruel but he has to understand his words were hurtful, I was wondering were was Ruffnut during all this, and also Im glad Hiccup did,nt just forgive Fishlegs to quickly unlit he heard he serious sorry and stand up for him, I hope the birthday party goes well and I hope Astrid doses not ruin it, and p.s. Im putting this story on TV Tropes, I admit I was going wait until this story had 10 chapters but I think this story deserve on TV Tropes, not that this story never deserve to be on TV Tropes, and I,ll also put Heaven's Light and Seven Days in Corona on TV Tropes to.

Should have named this chapter 'Breakdown'