|Reviews for Open|
| whyyousoserious chapter 1 . 7/14/2013
Awww... this was just so cute and sweet. Heihi. I've read this a long time ago already but I decided to make an account and leave some comments to my favorite stories... hehe. Share. :D Heihi
| sonamyfreakO chapter 1 . 6/10/2013
O.o ...I LOVED This fanfict! XD ...(especially the hot makeout scene!)
| manga fan 1101 chapter 1 . 2/15/2013
I like this fanfiction. It was really great! :)
| Melmel Phase chapter 1 . 2/9/2013
Oh my frog that was so cute! I loved it! Intensely amazing for your first fanfic. :D Very very very nice job! I absolutely adored it my dear -hearts- Congratulations on your first published fanfic! Welcome to passion :3 I can't wait to read more of your work! Keep it up, lovely
| Tokittoki chapter 1 . 1/25/2013
You asked for a review so here I am! _ The first reviewer for your first fic (feels kinda special :3)
I really enjoyed how you explained why Syo always let Natsuki make him wear dresses, his weak spots towards the older blond ('cause he's always like "Oh-ho look at me, I'm so manly" xDD).
One of my favourite parts was, doubtlessly, when Syo"exploded" when speaking about why he was aloof and the "Dear God, what have I done; he left off the -chan!" was amusing. Well...at least to me. xD
Just out of curiosity, were you inspired by Bon Jovi's song, "Thank you for loving me"? When I read that part, the song crossed my mind. _
Ok, now onto the constructive criticism!
There are some parts I would cut (but that's just my opinion :) ) like "It was almost eleven when they got back" 'cause you end up describing what they did: shopping time, cinema...
You describe the clothes too much, we don't need to know what they're wearing all the time.
The flashback...were the rest of the bunch there? How did they react to what happened? Even if they weren't present must have found awkward the two barely spoke, their uneasiness (since Natsuki is always running after smaller blond). And I would put the "After that night, Shou began to see Natsuki in a different light and realized something - he's in love with his best friend. His male best friend. Shou never thought he would have to tell himself that, but it's true, and there's no avoiding it." after the flashback scene because it's a kind of "conclusion", not sure if I made myself clear. -.-'
Sorry if I sounded dry, that wasn't my intention. :3 And... for a first fic this...sucked. Nah! Kiddin'! It was good, you're on the right way. Keep on working girl! I'm looking forward for reading more of your fics! Go, go, go!