You're an amazing, creative, and imaginative writer!

Do you plan on publish this? If you are I would definetly purchase a copy. Great story.

The story is a very good one! However, your grammar is very poor, spelling errors and appropriate words are all wrong. It ruins the story by not editing. I love the story and I wish you all the luck !

I love this story!

So Bennet is not giving Mary away or walking her down the aisle?

Does Charlotte know that Collins signed over Longbourn to Darcy? After that kick in the gonads, maybe Collins will stop breeding.

Fuck it, your story was going well until page 30 when everything went to shit, with insipid Jane and uncouth Mrs Bennet at Pemberley.

She has to embarrass herself during the dance

After what happened with Elizabeth and Mrs Collins, one would have expected Bennet to take heed of his daughters but he sends Lydia to a camp full of soldiers. Bennet is a failure of a father

Are they not going to tell Mrs Bennet about Collins?

Wow, Charlotte is a nasty piece of work

This bitch Elizabeth is really screwing up things. She needs to deal with it and get over it. Ungrateful. She's making Darcy's life miserable

A serene Jane is sickening

Bennet is a bastard. I have been reading this story backwards and I can't fathom how it went from here to the Darcys back in Longbourn with the bastard Bennets. You even left Mr Collins comeuppance to the very last pages and that too it's sparse. Instead we are subjected to a hysterical Jane in the end.

I hope Elizabeth tells her uncouth mother and indolent father and her sisters about Collins instead of shielding the bastard