Reviews for Bloodrein: Rise Of A Legend
Xealishkin chapter 4 . 6/2/2015
Sudden events 'just' after the chapter began, with very little lead in.

But, but...BUT... that was a major build up to a very short conversation... :/ (was she trying to find him, or avoid him...?)

Loved the interest that it generated though! :D

(i smell a love triangle coming on! XD )
Xealishkin chapter 3 . 6/2/2015
Fifth para; brushing the dirt "of" to 'off'

"no one" para; the "three" to 'three'

confused, you said half dragon, but never mentioned wolf...?

The clothes make me think modern, but the feel kinda seems in a time passed.

maybe define some of the ambient emotion during the more action/intense scenes.

Wasn't it just morning... and then it's night again? (time warp? XD )

Confused, she seemed slightly upset that he actually accepted the invite.

hehe, "sweetheart"... XD that's irritatingly cute coming from a stranger! X3

I like how you began describing Erin's transformation, and left it half way in order to catch up with Darren.
Xealishkin chapter 2 . 6/2/2015
First para; "Thank full" to 'thankful'

Fifth para; water dripping "of" to 'off' (maybe)

From the first chapter to the second, there was a switch from 3rd person to first. (just a slight note)

There wasn't much lead into being or becoming a clan, just kinda 'bam!' in a a clan. :P (as a note though, you did soon after explain a bit more through Darren's point of view)

I like the cute kinda sleepy banter (as they're still soaking wet! XD ) between Erin and Darren, and the humming to singing topped it off nicely. Ray's little view there in the end was nice, but seemed a little out of place or unnecessary.
Xealishkin chapter 1 . 6/2/2015
So, it says "little girl", and I'm imagining a 6-8 year old. Not completely sure on the age as it's not mentioned, neither is a description of either character. However, the lack of specific detail in their description does slide more focus onto the situation itself, and I think the event is more important at this point in the story-being the very beginning, and you want to catch interest more than you want define characters. (just as a thought though; my -(curiosity/lack of imagery)- on the details made me slightly distracted. I think even a vague hint might have helped.)

Strong and interest invoking start to a story. (definitely interested in the symbolism behind the morphing pendant :D (...and dragon's roar! :D ))
slender chapter 31 . 1/16/2015
..I'm sorry...but out of that WHOLE chapter my favorite part was when Fire told Alex to watch his tone and called him boy. That was like a holy crap he's screwed moment. But this story is badass and I saw where you said there was a sequal. Definatly checking that out
slender chapter 30 . 1/16/2015
...I...there are no words for how to decribe my reaction.

:o -go with that
slender chapter 29 . 1/16/2015
May I quote Kevin Hart?

"Its about to go down"
slender chapter 28 . 1/16/2015
slender chapter 27 . 1/16/2015
Ok I know its taken me a while to get back on here and back into this story and Im also aware I didn't review every chapter...but HOLY CRAP

Just the way the beggining of the chapter was set up! I think I cracked my tablet cause I was in suspense mode. I mean I knew what was going on but that was epically done. And the
slender chapter 26 . 1/16/2015
Yea cause nobody saw that comin'. I'm completely joking that was a hell ofa twist. Although I kinda wish you'd put the translations at the bottom of the page or maybe in brakets under the spell? Thats just my two cents.
Slender chapter 1 . 12/25/2014
Woah...goes to show what random searching will find.

this kinda sounds interesting.
SPNlover94 chapter 31 . 1/17/2014
HOLY CRAP THAT WAS EPIC! I knew she wasn't down and out for the count ...whole time...just had sand in my eyes lol. Death was epic and also his little freak out was perfect lol. I love this story and tho there were a few moments where I was all 'huh?' It straightened out enough for me to figure it out but that's good, a story that keeps you wondering. May just go read that sequel xD
SPNlover94 chapter 30 . 1/17/2014
OMG soo many things to address! First off WHAAAA? James wasn't James? Still cool what they were planning. Second, Zuki's mom? Coolness lol. Thirdly, don't let scarlet die pweeeaasse. And fourthly...YES HE'S BACK! lol
SPNlover94 chapter 29 . 1/17/2014
James in the almighty that's been talked about throughout this story? Sweeeeeeeeeeet. And he knows Alex killed Erin? Ooooooooo this gonna be gooood. Lol
SPNlover94 chapter 28 . 1/17/2014
...*flips laptop* nooooo! Not Erin shes the main person :'(
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