|Reviews for Swan Princess: Rise of the Forbidden Arts|
| mackie3232 chapter 16 . 4/29
I wanted to say that I really love the story so far. I love the way that it keeps me on the edge of my seat. I especially love the writing, and I can tell that you have worked really hard to finish this story. I cannot wait to read how it ends!
There are a couple things that I noticed in the story that you need to keep in mind.
- I noticed that throughout the story, you had a lot of little misspelled words like of or for. If I were you, I would re-read your chapters and make sure to spell everything correctly.
- Another thing I noticed was when someone said something, you did not really specify who was speaking, but instead wrote she nodded and I was not really sure who was speaking and who was nodding and stuff like that. I have to, a couple times, read back and figure out who was talking. So please specify who is talking or doing whatever after the quote.
- Finally, just re-read a couple parts and make sure it makes sense.
Other than that I love the story so far, very creative and suspenseful. Once again, I cannot wait to read the rest!
| SarRose chapter 16 . 4/10
Gah! I'm soo anxious to hear more about it. What happening next?! Please keep writing! I loving it!
| Guest chapter 16 . 3/16
Omg this is the best story ever but you have got to continue omg you should have Odette get kidnapped during the war or while she's in the garden alone or the baby dies that what happened to my cusin.
| PeriBelle chapter 16 . 3/1
| WTF123 chapter 3 . 2/14
Wonderful chapter, I'm really enjoying most of the character interactions here! Jean-Bob, Puffin and Whizzer all seem in-character here, King Jacob seems to be a very interesting person here, and that bater between him and Derek at the end was utterly priceless. I also like the callbacks to the previous film(s), those were very nice touches indeed. I can't wait to see where this archery contest goes!
| Megan Lyle chapter 16 . 2/5
This is a terrific chapter! You should update it more often.
| Guest chapter 15 . 2/3
Great story love it :) hope you write soon! Looking forward to it
| white pedal chapter 16 . 2/5
Oh poor Odette! Cute chapter:)
| Autobot00001 chapter 16 . 2/5
Impressive writing. I especially liked the goblin language. And man! Sargon just can't leave Odette alone, can he?!
| mpowers045 chapter 16 . 2/4
What if Bromley accidently killed the goblin commander to save Derek's life and then as they celebrate victory Derek told the girls that Bromley heroically saved his life and then the girls are all over him now that would be funny huh?
| WTF123 chapter 2 . 1/22
Wonderful chapter! The setup with Odette's birthday is a very nice way to start this off, it fits in very well with the spirit of the first three films. King Jacob sounds like an interesting character, I look forward to seeing what he can do. The backstory with Derek's father and how his death came to be sounds fantastic, it fits in perfectly with the original movie. It's plausible, it's dramatic, and dammit I like it! I can't wait to see how this setup is handles, plus how the events of the prologue will be followed up on.
| WTF123 chapter 1 . 1/2
Wow, that really was intense! I'd never considered the possibility of goblins existing in the Swan Princess universe, so I'm interested to see how it's handled here. The action was good, it was fast paced, and I'm now very curious about this new shadowy character who seems to be Odette's brother. That's a great concept, I can't wait to see where this goes!
| Em567 chapter 15 . 12/27/2014
| Em345 chapter 15 . 12/6/2014
Love it update soon
| Guest chapter 15 . 12/6/2014
Please update quickly de