|Reviews for Sunspot|
| You will fear my laser face chapter 3 . 12/25/2013
I was expecting something similar to the isacriot organization in Hellsing.
| You will fear my laser face chapter 2 . 12/25/2013
I don't think edward knows what video game is. Jasper's arrogance really pissed me off. "Human's can't harm us." Bah. A can of aerosol and a match is all it takes to kill you mister made of lighter fluid.
| Sith Droideka chapter 14 . 8/10/2013
Bye, bye, Edward.
| Sith Droideka chapter 13 . 7/30/2013
"She was elated when her jabs actually hit home and struck Adella's White Sage gasped in either surprise or pain, and glared at Meryl out of the corner of her eye." Very confusing, what is Meryl actually hitting?
| Sith Droideka chapter 12 . 7/30/2013
Is Lelu a dhampir too? Or is she just an ordinary human? (Okay, you know what I mean. Ordinary in comparison).
Still, pretty good so far!
| Sith Droideka chapter 11 . 7/30/2013
Lemme guess... Diamond and company are reaping what they sow, and Topaz is the first person that was nice to Pyrite.
| Sith Droideka chapter 10 . 7/30/2013
Now, now, Meryl, you know what the correct way to treat your visiting noblemen/noblewomen is. The Guillotine.
I quite like the intrigue! Nice to see that not everything's rosy in the anti-Volturi factions.
| Sith Droideka chapter 8 . 7/30/2013
Never mind, confusion resolved.
I liked the fighting. Call me vapid, but it was quite good. Also, theories: that Black Sage dude is actually Dr. Facilier from Princess and the Frog. Either that or he has Facilier's "Friends on the Other Side".
| Sith Droideka chapter 7 . 7/30/2013
Wait, is Aiden and Aaron Meryl's brother? Are Aiden and Meryl even related at all? Aaron and Meryl are siblings, right? I am confused.
Probably what I get for reading this at 4 in the morning, eh? Still, looking forward to some action. Serves that fantasy cottage right.
| Sith Droideka chapter 6 . 7/30/2013
How did you make Esme and Alice likable characters? And even Carlisle (sort-of)? I thought that was impossible!
| Sith Droideka chapter 5 . 7/30/2013
Animé meets Twilight. Having never been to an animé convention but heard plenty of stories from my animé-loving sister, this sounds quite realistic.
Although I will point out that your POV is jumping around like crazy. I understand that this is the equivalent of television shows jumping between characters, but it can be somewhat distracting.
| Sith Droideka chapter 4 . 7/29/2013
"Renesmee felt a chilld creep up her spine." Is there a child creeping up Renesmee's spine, or is there a chill creeping up Renesmee's spine?
"Renesmee sat next to Charla on the sofa." I see that Charlie's transformed into that Charizard Ash's Charizard from the Pokémon animé had a crush on.
Other than that, good job so far.
| Sith Droideka chapter 2 . 7/29/2013
I think I like these versions of the Cullens- based on "Growing up Cullen" or something, right?
I also think this Renesmee is much less creepy than the one in canon. So there's that too. OOC for the better instead of for the worse, if such a thing exists.
| Sith Droideka chapter 1 . 7/29/2013
Interesting start, but I do feel the need to point out that "Meryl, Aaron, Arshaka and Lelu are already on-sight in Seattle" should be "Meryl, Aaron, Arshaka, and Lelu are already on-site in Seattle". Grammar and correct words are important too!
| IsobelFrances chapter 10 . 5/23/2013
This story is really good, I look forward to reading more