This is a really cool story idea! That disease is totally freaky, and it makes the story really interesting!

Terrible writing. Go fuck your mom

FUCK YOU STUPID LAWLCLAN

Why not continue

Oh Noez

LawlClan is shit and so is this story

Beavis and Butthead babysit Veni

Beavis and Butthead are two stupid teenagers who are now babysitters. One day, one of their customers was the family of a girl named Veni, whom Beavis and Butthead were supposed to babysit.

Veni's parents left their house so Beavis and Butthead could babysit her.

Butthead: Hey Beavis, let's see how bald Veni is.

Beavis got out a laser pen and aimed it at Veni's head. Then, Beavis accidently aimed it at Veni's eye.

Veni: Oh my god! I can't see!

Butthead: According to our calculations, Veni is balder than a bald eagle.

Beavis: What do we do with her head?

Butthead: We should kick it!

Beavis: Kick it, kick it, kick it!

Butthead kicked Veni.

Veni: Oww! That hurts!

Beavis and Butthead still kicked Veni's head.

An hour later...

Veni: I'm hungry!

Butthead: What should we feed her?

Beavis: Heheheh! Lets feed her a can of beans.

Butthead: Bald people don't eat beans, dumba*s!

Beavis and Butthead turned on the stove and cooked Veni food. The lever on the pan was in a dangerous area. Veni grabbed hold of the lever and got burned a little bit.

Veni: Oww!

After Veni ate dinner, which was beans by the way, Veni was holding a fork. She found an electrical socket.

Beavis: Do it, do it, do it!

Veni: What?

Butthead: Put the fork inside the thingy, you dillweed!

Veni put the fork inside the electrical socket and got shocked.

Butthead: Cool!

Veni was laying on the floor.

Butthead: I think we need to give it CPR.

Beavis: Yay! PPR!

Butthead: Do I have to kiss her?

Beavis: Uhhh, I dunno! I think so!

Butthead kissed Veni.

Butthead: Uhh, what now?

Beavis: Push her chest!

Butthead pushed Veni's chest. Veni wasn't responding.

Butthead: What now, buttmunch?

Beavis: Slap her! Slap her!

Butthead slapped Veni really hard. Veni responded and survived.

Butthead: Dammit, Beavis! Veni is alive!

Beavis: (to Veni) Wanna play ball in the street?

Veni: Is that dangerous?

Butthead: No, you fartmuffin, it's safe!

Veni played ball in the street. Then, he got hit by a car.

Butthead: Cool!

The End

This is ok I guess, kinda looks promising, but maybe not that good if you keep it going. Sorry dude

that was amazing! keep it up

Ok

So I'm flipping through the pages of the Warriors archive, not really expecting anything big, and then I see /this/. First thing I see is your avvie, and then I look at where the Pen Name is, and it's yours. And you have no idea how freaking excited I became. :'D I was like: OMGIT'SVENI ASDFGHJKL and then I read your author's note, so if it's you and Jimmy writing this, it's gonna be amazing. I blame myself for not having you on my Author Alert that I didn't know about it before. Wait. You posted this two days ago. Never mind, I'm /not/ totally out of the loop. :3

Anyway. I love the concept and just everything about it. Bluestar. Yes. /nodnod

I can't really find any grammar errors or anything (Frosty pointed it out, and it got fixed, so), but I think FFN screwed up with the spacing sometimes with italicized words. (I hate that I can never spell 'italicized' correctly on the first try. 8U)

Yeah... I don't really have anything else to say. :'D This chapter is great and I love that Whitestorm and Tigerclaw are frozen. The dark magic of it. I like.

Although when Graypool talks about the favor she did for Bluestar, I kind of expected Tigerclaw and Whitestorm to question Bluestar a bit about that. But then it would've gotten off-topic and blah, blah, blah. Plus the way you've written it, it wouldn't fit very well, so I guess that's good that you didn't.

I also see it's a Blue/Fire fic. I can't believe I still ship this. XD

It's just really great so far, you two.

Okay, so I said I didn't have anything to say, and I said more. This is just a regular thing with me. I can't stop rambling. DX Anyway. I'll tag along with Frosty by saying, "I expect updaaaaaates." :D

~Coqui

Mm, this should turn out to be a good story. I was a little confused at the ending there. But surely you have your reasons. I'm looking forward to more exciting chapters. Certainly this was one to be different from the rest. ;D

-Brightpaw of LawlClan

I'd like to start with the CC first, so:

""Tigerstar, you won't kill her." Bluestar paused slightly". It's 'Tigerclaw' right now, unless you've been calling him by the wrong name all this time. :3

Also, the ending seemed a bit oddly placed- awkward, even. It's a little rushed too, I think, but that's how most chapters end.

I don't quite get Whitestorm and Tigerclaws' reactions, though. It seems over done, with them seeming as though they aren't breathing and schtuff. The comment about their open jaws is a little too much, as well, and it doesn't quite fit with their personalities. I'd think Tigerclaw would have a more aggressive reaction, and Whitestorm would keep his shock as hidden as he could. They both heard Graypool's curse, no? So that would've been a slight form of warning, even if they didn't expect it.
Then it just doesn't seem to fit with what's going on with Graypool and Bluestar.

End CC. :D

I just love the whole idea and how you incorporated it with Warriors! I assume this is going to have some pairing, since the concept is from Beauty and the Beast, so I really can't wait for the other chapters! I'm kinda hoping it's not Oakstorm, just because he's either dead by now, or he and Bluestar have already ended things, so. But I can't think of another cat that could the character to help Bluestaaar!
Definite favorite, so I expect updaaaates:3

This sounds interesting. Great idea! I love Beauty and the Beast!