Please write more this seems like a good story.

Please write more, I think this could become a Really Good Story

this is really good i cant wait till its updated

It's a good enough story line only have you ever considered getting a Beta Reader? This is full of errors. One example:

''Joe do you think you could give me a hand with the book's today" It should be: "Joe, do you think you could give me a hand with the books today?"

If you care about your writing, and want to provide something a reader can enjoy, I suggest you look into getting someone to help you with your punctuation and spelling. (You typed tounge...it is TONGUE)