|Reviews for Gemini|
| Blue Rogue Linds chapter 1 . 1/29/2013
This was actually a decent read, one of the better stories I've seen lurking around the filth here of late. You usually drift more towards the dreaded shounen-ai, but that doesn't seem to be the case here. And it works for you. Write more like this.
One thing did annoy me, however. 'Laughed' and 'giggled' are not appropriate dialect verbs. You can't talk to someone and have them understand you while laughing or giggling. For example: "Well you're going after me, so anything I play will sound fantastic," I giggled watching his mouth gape. No, no as it should be something like: "Well you're going after me, so anything I play will sound fantastic," I added with a giggle, watching his mouth gape.
Well done. :)
| Anotheranonymous001 chapter 1 . 1/27/2013