|Reviews for The Cookie Jar|
| Last true Naruto fan chapter 1 . 11/21/2016
I want to say thank you for writing this story and I hope to wish you and your family a Happy Thanksgiving and a blessed New Year now I gotta go my cat's summoned Odin the fictitious stories of my cat rated M for Mature audiences when he's not being a menace to society While Drinking his Juice in South Central
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/28/2016
I am going to use this site to fight the actual true and then the Final Fantasy 13 Lightnings Return what everyone saw at the end of Lightnings Return with her on the way to the memorial for Sister Sara Edwards though there's nothing left to fight for could you realize that I cannot be returned to life because she is not the goddess and the god of light does not have the power to resurrect the dead that's why you left in charge of Expo in Valhalla and because he was afraid of it too so he wouldn't help her he was lying and because of the way Serah and Dodge both died at the end of Final Fantasy 13 the soul scattered across to the astral planes because the crystal that contain them soul shattered at the end Lightning's took both Dodge and The Echoes that was Sara faren who's actually chaos yeul if you watch Final Fantasy 13-2 you'll see the chaos yeul was there one for Serah and Dodge both died and you saw him 13 to when she passes on the chaos sometimes scatters Caius Ballad could make it the didn't make it in time to retrieve the body before the chaos activator she on the way to Valhalla both individuals were killed same time both individuals were killed by the fal'cie her chaotic energy was drawn to the Echoes above Dodge and serah farron and upon that incident that's why I serah received eye of the goddess Etro and Dodge received the power of teleportation he would 2/2 of the chaos you'll and the chaos you what was left of the god of Lights mother she did not die when he pushed you into the chaos and she said her soul shattered into fragments of different personality traits of hers and if we took all the took on the image of yeul the real yeul was sealed away in void Beyond she broke the rules of the city and she also did it to keep the monster at Bay the fallacy has summoned the Destroyer City and she was only want to keep it in check so she see herself in the void Beyond so you'll that's why she didn't know Noel. Or serah I came here to check something out something that I already know you and I are the same we can see the future because and the show people the way only yeul one has power granted to it by the the goddess Etro then you going to ask how was it that the others haven't because the Echoes of her she was not inMortal despite the country of beliefs it was told to keep their enemies from attempting to assassinate her for some actually did believe she had immortality and be reborn but that was not possible it was just a rumor they keep assassination attempts down on her that's why the highest one of kind of Caius Ballad fell in love with the young yeul she also broke the rules by marrying a young Caius Ballad hence her name the same as Caius is his name she was his wife and he would your timeline that's why he was so far the protector. Say what you want about what I just told you but that's not part of Final Fantasy 13 Wikipedia when they made the game I'm not sure what that was but I know one thing the actor who voiced snow was actually in contract dispute with the company and probably rightfully so they don't pay those people enough money and that's not fair to them. The side effect is at the end of Lightnings Return is going to reveal that a Lumina told the lightning the only fake I know is Serah. She knew was serah is chaos yeul here's another hint at the beginning of Final Fantasy 13 2 the 17 serah farron and Noelfought against Atlas you heard mog say servant of time. Daughter of Chaos because even mog knew it and various times do Final Fantasy 13-2 he hinted that the serah was not human if you listen to the various missions he made reference to it if you look carefully at the character of serah farron in the game who is a lazy eye so I go to send me a higher than her right I forgot what they call that but that's not natural the original as you play throughout the game you begin to understand that she's not really her but why would I tell you this because I was trying to improve your story but like you said let's pay no attention to the elephant in the room if fanfiction good to a point but if you're going to harass your friends but you don't like what they wrote to you then you should be writing on the site and you do decide to service go to the Star Wars fanfic you want to see how to properly do fan service or both how about a fanfic the bat and a beauty because I'll be honest with you at least that person a little nicer than you are but I do like your story and I wish you weren't such a jerk about things I'm just trying to help you I wish you would grow up and act your age not your shoe size I still like the story it's too bad you're not grown up and mature enough to understand that but I can't I still thank you for writing this story he was very well done you have a wonderful holidays
| Reality check chapter 11 . 5/31/2016
You should make the story take place at the end of Lightnings Return postgame fanfare also you must take serah farron out of your story serah farron is not the real she was part of the chaos at lightning fight against the Sanctum in the final fight on Eden the chaotic Yeul she was part of it when serah farron died and Dodge young boy had the crystal shattered by orphan at the end of Final Fantasy 13 the energy you saw after the crystals Shadow with Souls of both Dodge and serah farron at the same time Yeul was there chaotic Yeul and when that Yeul die some of the chaotic energy flouted out with that merged with the Echoes of serah farron and Dodge but they're not really dodged or serah farron they're just Echoes of people who died that's why serah farron how the eyes of the goddess Dodge have some of the power to but because he was a boy he did not inherit the eyes of the goddess but he inherit her power to teleport wherever she wanted to go by thinking about it that's how him and his father ended up in serendipity he want to see a big bunch of chocobos and that was his first thought yes I know what you're probably thinking how would he know that if he was just an echo the reason for that is crazy I could have it whatever memories left behind by the person who died so some of it was him and some of it wasn't latched onto enough of the echo of the individual passed on to quit just enough of a hint the full someone that's why the chaotic energy is so unpredictable but serah farron died a thousand years ago as the dog and a chaotic chaos right before lightning managed to get them to the new undo the damage she pulled back the hands of time and create a new unseen realm Nova chrysalia became the new unseen Realm and you turn back the hands of time before the chaos around affected Gran pulse and that is where the oven the story and that is why I said it would not be returned to life and your story if you want to be a true to the story this will take place at the Final Fantasy 13 Lightnings Return thank you and if you don't do it then I will have a nice
| Terrian10 chapter 29 . 5/9/2016
Man it's been while a while since I came back to this story sad it hasn't updated but netherless it let me forget about my problems for the day now I can sleep thanks for the story
| ServeMeTheSky chapter 29 . 1/7/2016
I love reading these little snippets into the future lives of the FF XIII gang. I like the idea that after they save the world, they can all settle down and have simple lives and look after their families. These stories are so cute.
| Seeker of the Skies chapter 29 . 11/19/2015
Fun chapter. Just about everything Diana does is hilarious though.
| Guest chapter 26 . 11/19/2015
Interesting chapter. It's nice seeing the light shown on the younger sisters, considering how much I love Diana.
| Seeker of the Skies chapter 16 . 11/7/2015
I haven't read fan-fiction for a while since I've been busy with school, and this was a great way to get back into your stories. I've always loved them and a crazy Diana is always fantastic. That and the idea of Vanille bugging a school dance and Hope performing back ground checks on everyone. That one made me laugh.
another funny thing is that I'm behind in this story but had no idea what chapter I was up to. Considering last chapter was the one where all of Vanille and Hope's children were introduced I think I fluked it and clicked the right one right off the bat.
| Patton chapter 1 . 7/26/2015
It's always good to see you writing again I love this story you've really given this fandom new life I was also wondering if you would accept prompts and when we will new installments of whispers of the gods and the outpost
| Cormag Ravenstaff chapter 29 . 7/24/2015
Your understanding of children never ceases to make me smile and cheer me up
| TykkiMikk chapter 29 . 7/24/2015
i wish i had a active imagination like that when i was a kid this was simply great to read it defiantly lifted my sour mood up a bit. Thank you.
| Happy1K1nob1 chapter 28 . 6/14/2015
This series has been pretty amazing, and I have certainly enjoyed pretty much the entire thing. I'd definitely love to see more here, and in Ordinary Heros, and so on.
Because honestly? I find a whole lot of your stuff really fun. :)
| Happy1K1nob1 chapter 27 . 6/6/2015
This one has to be one of the most (if not *the* most) hilarious things you have ever written! I really enjoyed this one. :)
| Happy1K1nob1 chapter 21 . 4/22/2015
This was an amazing chapter. I loved it and I was smiling all the way through. Thank you so much.
| haemokin chapter 28 . 4/21/2015
Keep it up!
Oh,and, just promoting, is it possible for the children(around 7) ask the parents how are babies made?The reactions will be epic,their answers will be priceless.I can't remember if it's already done,but if it isn't,give it some consideration.