Reviews for Criminal
Fireball-Fuchsia chapter 1 . 5/19/2014
Aw, this was kind of cute. I liked it.

( 。・_・。)人(。・_・。 )

( F ) ( i ) ( r ) ( e ) ( b ) ( a ) ( l ) ( l ) - ( F ) ( u ) ( c ) ( h ) ( s ) ( i ) ( a )
lilith dracul chapter 1 . 4/11/2014
Its pretty with its simplicity
Flareose - Knifepoint Entry chapter 1 . 3/21/2013
... Woah that's a lot of comas and such. The Dialogue is pretty bad as well, and the pacing... While not as bad, I would have liked to see more to give more of an impact when they find out.

" You do stuff like this. ",

"When it should be like this."

All in all, not bad but, I know sometime in the future your writing will improve.
Mon Esprit Libre chapter 1 . 3/18/2013
Why do you write so well
Like, your ideas are great you just need better grammar like eruigiwer
Shiragiku-chaan chapter 1 . 2/17/2013
It's sad but I love the phrases in italics.
Sai the Ink Master chapter 1 . 2/1/2013
Not your best? Are you kidding me? That was awesome!
TigrezzTail chapter 1 . 1/29/2013
Well, that was different. It did at least fit the song. Just a little too disjointed for me.