|Reviews for The Little Things|
| zer0zeal chapter 8 . 4/10/2013
Why do all of these Careers think it's going to be such a walk in the park to win the Hunger Games? They be crey-crey, fo' realz. Shit.
P.S. - I hope she didn't toss her cookies ON the poor corpse. Yuck.
| zer0zeal chapter 7 . 4/10/2013
| zer0zeal chapter 6 . 4/10/2013
She stared at her feet while sprinting to the cornucopia?
| zer0zeal chapter 5 . 4/10/2013
She can look good AND run and hide and escape. She'll probably get further, statistically.
| zer0zeal chapter 4 . 4/10/2013
So basically . . . his sis is as good as dead?
| zer0zeal chapter 3 . 4/10/2013
The sun would not have sank into the sea if it had been wearing a proper flotation device.
| zer0zeal chapter 2 . 4/10/2013
Sneaky, sneaky Hope.
| zer0zeal chapter 1 . 4/10/2013
Oh no! My beloved head! Why? Whhhyyyyyyy?
| seasprays chapter 8 . 3/9/2013
So glad you updated, haven't seen a new chapter from you in ages...
This one was good, well the second part was really good, the first paragraph I didn't like as much, it seemed just to state things we already knew. Seemed like you were trying to fill in the word limit.
La la la...
But the second one was good. Nice...or not so nice...imagery of the broken boy. But I'd do less of the first paragraph and more of the...
...where was I? Yes, do more of the imagery, more description of the bottom of the cliff or such where he has fallen. Or even how it felt for Cashmere to push him?
I like the last line too. Short and sharp.
| TikTakJabberJay chapter 8 . 3/9/2013
I like this one. Even though I've already asked for some I'd love a Lavinia one if that's okay.
| seasprays chapter 7 . 2/21/2013
Nice idea to use Seneca Crane. That's one of my favourite scenes from the movie, where he looks into the bowl of night lock.
I think this one lacked the spark that your others have had. It was still very good, but the first paragraph seemed mostly like you were just re telling the story a little. It'd be good if you pulled back a bit in that part and then gave us more detail about how Crane felt on seeing the berries, something like that.
But still, well done :)
| Saphira42 chapter 7 . 2/21/2013
Poor Seneca! The irony of the berries being in the room that he is locked in just kills me, and I think that you reflected it well. :)
| Heart of Sunshine chapter 6 . 2/10/2013
Aww, Mags wasn't a typical evil Career. At least least she survived her race to death, but she didn't want to be in the Games. :( Poor Mags.
| Saphira42 chapter 6 . 2/9/2013
*dissovles in a pile of tears* I'm all feely today... That was really sad, and I can't quite pinpoint why... I honestly cannot say exactly what made it so sad, but it was wonderful. Good job! :D
| seasprays chapter 6 . 2/9/2013
Incoming! I did quite like this one. And thanks for writing the character I requested.
The first paragraph would be my favourite; I love the children trying to distract each other, it's a great image. Also quite ironic, as they race to the place where they may be sentenced to death.
The second paragraph wasn't quite as strong, but still a good one of course. The line '...that's where my eyes lay...' is a tad odd I feel; wouldn't she be looking ahead, not at her feet, while she sprinted for her life? And I'd drop the 's' on 'anyways'.
Also, that line, 'But then I was reaped' is great. Just works there, so final, so matter of fact. Well done all up!
I believe I have requested Cecilia, so I'll just continue adding to my little list. I'd love to see you do Cashmere or Gloss please.