Reviews for The Parson's Son
Guest chapter 16 . 6/4
I like your stories, read them before, and never reviewed. Thought I'd let you know that, but sometimes, your endings feel a little all the loose ends aren't tied up completely. Keep up the good work though.
ChibiDawn23 chapter 16 . 1/3
I'm loving domesticated (well, sort of) Lestrade! And Mel's love of Supernatural, (if I'm ever in a bad mood, that Eye of the Tiger gets me every time!) though i got some "Countrycide" and Torchwood vibes from this latest installment. I like how you take real cases and adapt them. Moving on to the Somerton Man!
QueenNaberrie chapter 16 . 7/23/2016
Eww! Well, I didn't suspect incest. That's for sure. But now I see why the family was being so secretive about Sarah. Sherlock was at least right about George not being guilty of the mutilations. But knowing of Sherlock's reputation, Caroline wasn't very smart if didn't think Sherlock wouldn't figure out the absolute truth in trying to prove George's innocence of the pony mutilations. Poor Miriam, though. It might almost be better for her if she was put up for adoption so she never knows the truth about her parents being brother & sister. I'd be concerned about birth defects. I'm glad, too, that Sherlock let John help with this case. He needed to feel useful again. Bravo! Excellent story. It really kept me guessing. Now onto the sequel.
Otaku and Proud chapter 2 . 6/24/2016
I had to google Parthian shaft and it's exactly what Sherlock would do.
Otaku and Proud chapter 1 . 6/24/2016
While I'm glad John has recovered and wants to work with Sherlock like they used to, I was hoping to see John's initial anger and betrayal before the gradual forgiveness and acceptance.
englishtutor chapter 16 . 9/11/2015
I am absolutely galloping through your wonderfully delightful stories. I apologize for not reviewing on every single one, and on every chapter, as I should. I am enjoying them a nearly sinful amount and reading when I really ought to be working! Thank you for sharing your considerable talent for characterization, plot, and description.
Nightmare Prince chapter 1 . 12/12/2014
Just a quick disclaimer, I am 95% fandom blind having only watched the first few episodes of season one.

Firstly, I would like to commend you on being able to fictionalize a true story into your fandom. I’ve seen it attempted many times but rarely have I seen it done so well. Kudos Mate.

[Have the most careful sex imaginable] I laughed out loud at this sentence. The manner in which it is placed just serves to increase the humour, especially seeing as he has a slew of normal restrictions preceding it. Easily one of the best lines I’ve read in a story.

I really liked the part about him typing out his thoughts, it created a sense of emotional depth to him as a character, especially the segment in which he never saves the documents afterwards. On the other hand, [But aside from the occasional . . . necromanced back to life] seemed a little confusing to me. Perhaps you could consider revising it? That being said, the description necromanced instead of reactivated was an incredibly good move on your part.

The message exchange between Sherlock and Lestrade was especially humorous. I like the way you built up the tension and then dissolved it with that little anecdote, it prevented the situation about those poor ponies from becoming too much for the reader. [Learn how to use a comma correctly] That line deserves an award, especially when placed in terms of the fanfiction community.

What is with these two and destroying technology. Sherlock breaks his phone and John nearly breaks his laptop. Anger management, boys. Anger management.

The hook that you’ve ended the chapter is quite a good one, we see that Sherlock was lying to John for his own good and also is meeting with this Mrs. Edalji. Very intriguing.

Looking forward to reading more when time permits.

-Ciao Mate
The Jollyginger chapter 5 . 12/5/2014
Aw. No incredible shattering of church decorum? I'm almost disappointed. XD.
I liked your characterization of the Parson and how he breaks down Sherlock by touch.
You introduce a lot of characters but none are really utilized except for Edalji. If there;s a significant time gap between chapters, I might not remember who they all are, or what they're importance is. When a character is introduced, it's best if we see them doing something or saying something, so that we can remember who they are later on in the story. Otherwise they're just names.
Liked the blindness test. I can tell you put a lot of thought into Sherlock's deductions, and that pays off. They're logical, but still amazingly intricate, as we've come to know from the show.
In addition, Lestrade and Sherlock are well balanced. Neither of them is doing too much or too little. Lestrade isn't the Boy Robin to Sherlock's Batman. It's not focusing too much on Lestrade, either. The two are equally interesting characters, and are a delight to read.
Eager to see what happens next.
The Jollyginger chapter 4 . 12/5/2014
Excellent ending line; Can't wait to see what Sherlock's like in church.
Liking Lestrade more and more-you've done an excellent job of capturing his character from the show, but expanding on it.
Also, the plot thickens! Intrigued by the case, and eager to see where everything goes.
Complaints (Honestly, you keep doing the same things right, and it's easier for me if I just point out what you do WRONG):
While the flowers, and the scene after it-gotta admit I cracked up at the idea of molly and John having sex in the morgue-were sweet and entertaining, it felt like it came too quickly. Last chapter, we learned they had marital problems, and that John's becoming estranged from Molly. Suddenly, everything's fixed overnight. It feels like there was never a real problem or any real tension, because the resolution comes before any tension can build.
That can make things a little too light, make me think I'm just here for the characters rather than actually seeing them struggle in a conflict. Just something to keep in mind when you write conflicts like this in the future.
Overall: entertaining. I'm annoyed i have to stop and review the end of each one so I can't just keep reading.
The Jollyginger chapter 3 . 12/5/2014
Maybe I'm biased because I launched straight into this chapter from the last without a break, but i think it's a bit weird to go from Lestrade talking about his marital problems to Melissa providing her perspective in the first scene of the next chapter. Maybe space those out a bit.
Superb reference to the Empty House, by the way, with that dummy. Assuming that's what it was. Also, recognizing this was released before the third season, I have to admire your decision not to discuss how Sherlock survived, leaving it at "his return". That' was clever, and it lets the fic make sense even after the third chapter's been released.
Love love LOVED mrs. Hudson having a crush on Lestrade, and just her characterization in general. Props.
Liked the way Sherlock analyzed Lestrades use of the word "we." Also, you bringing in the Fall case.
A minor complaint: You explain the Jessop case out of dialogue, then name it again immediately after IN DIALOGUE. You could just alter that paragraph so it's wholly mentioned in dialogue and yet still clear.
Like I mentioned in my first review, not generally a Jolly guy (LOL. Just realized that's funny because my username is...nevermind) but that last scene sold it pretty well. I can buy that they have a relationship. I do think it's a bit odd that John's trying to be quite so forgiving of Molly's lie, and not furious as opposed to mopey (though maybe you're trying to highlight that he's got his priorities kind of skewed and isn't expressing himself).
All in all, good chapter. Will read on.
The Jollyginger chapter 2 . 12/5/2014
I liked the tension between Sherlock and Caroline, it was very in the spirit of the show and the banter felt copy-and-pasted from an episode transcript as well. I also thought it was cool that Sherlock hears John whenever he does anything wrong. Hell, even the actual SHOW did that, except after this fanfic was published, so really, Moffat and Gatiss were ripping you off.
Sherlock's characterization is spot on the whole way through, by the way. Just dark enough, while still being likable. The deduction are all perfectly in style, all feel legit.
First of all, what's RP? As in, "tyneside accemt corrected into RP"? Is this a common term I don't know about? Probably best to clarify.
A bigger gripe of mine is thatSherlock doesn't seem to get much from his interviewing Caroline. So there have been letters. So? He doesn't ask to see them, or even ask for specifics. He's very accepting that there are in fact letters, but that the contents don't matter. Which is unusual for any investigator, but all the more so for Sherlock, given that we've seen him deduct through handwriting before. Maybe that comes later?
Also, I woud avoid using the term Parthian Shaft. Not only may some readers blink and not understand it, even if you're familiar with the term, it kind of underscores the scene. Like, ha ha! Look how clever that closing remark was! In case you missed it, Sherlock was being clever! By trying to emphasize it, you cheapened the overall effect of the scene.
Eager to see what comes next.
The Jollyginger chapter 1 . 12/4/2014
I think my favorite bit of this might've been "No, I don't work for good, either." I could just about hear Cumberbatch saying that.
Not sure if that bullet John took happened in an earlier fic or if it's a plot point of the one primarily, but it's does build intrigue and make me want to read on.

Those texts are done perfectly, and the lack of physical description in between made the hints the texts gave you as to what was happening all the better. Also, it felt like something from the show, and it just altogether worked perfectly.
Never bought into Jolly pairing, but as I haven't seen any of their relationship in-story I can't truly complain about it. Besides, I think that you're able to pull it off convincingly.

Love the feel of the story so far-feels like the first two minutes of a sherlock episode- and I can't wait to read more.
One nitpick: That last sentence, "in a non-boring fashion." Probably should have been, "And don''t be boring." In the manner of the show, and all.
See, when you get me to make complaints that minor, then you know you've done a good job.
On the whole? Hugely enjoyable, totally going to read on. Thanks for writing!
Golden Panther chapter 1 . 11/26/2014
First impressions are important and you have made a beautiful first impression.
The description was beautiful, particularly the way you described the shadows in the hallway at the beginning. It was simple and that was all that was needed.
Can I just say thank you for making characters human? It has been a long time since I have read something that has made characters human- relatable and utterly charming. What I enjoyed the most about this first chapter was that you didn't try too hard. John is relatable and sad and Sherlock is...well, Sherlock. You really feel for these characters and to see that emotion, that hardcore, down to earth emotion was very refreshing to me.
The humor was great. I found the text messages to be very well done and it was perhaps my favorite part of the chapter. It's just so in character and I can just picture in my head Sherlock just rolling his eyes.
What I found interesting was that you based this on a real case. That's something that most people don't really do anymore, and being someone who adores historical based pieces, it is extremely nice to see that.
As far as constructive criticism goes, there were no punctuation or grammatical errors that I could see. The English language is obviously your strong suit. You have mastery of character development and description.
However, I would like to suggest one minor aspect that may or may not be needed, but will be helpful for you to think about. It involves description of character action. Describe what the character is doing. For example, when John is texting Sherlock back, mention the way his fingers move, the way his face looks, perhaps even go into his head and do an inner monologue. These details will help make the character development deeper, will give you more word count, and will give you fine details. Fine details is something that most people do not necessarily do and even though most of the time, simple words and phrases such as "said" and "rolled his eyes" will do justice, it would be very interesting to see more than just a simple word. Although, I would also like to remind you of the phrase "less is more".
Again, most of the time, this isn't necessary, but it is just something to think about.
Overall, this story was great and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Look forward to more.

All the best in everything,
Nothing Really Specific
Manga-lunatic chapter 2 . 11/25/2014
I love the way you write Sherlock! His conversation with Mrs. Edalji was spot on, and like how he just mentions the letters without going into how he knew about them in the first place. I also like how he smiles because he's interested, and how Mrs. Edalji took it to mean something else.

I really like the way you write the interactions between Holmes and DI Lestrade. The good detective is severely underutilized in the BBC series, and I like how you flesh out his character while keeping him true to form. The Angry Birds bit made me laugh, by the way, as did Sherlocks calling it idiotic.

The parting words of Sherlock is so like him, always wanting the last say or trying to one up anyone who displeases him in anyway. It was information that, if given in a nicer way, I believe would have given Lestrade some piece of mind. Instead, he probably doubled the amount of stress he was feeling.

This was a great chapter, very well done with nary a grammar mistake. Your writing flows so nicely, I'm jealous!
Levhitor chapter 1 . 11/23/2014
Awesome Opening, love the humor. Also quite a nice touch with the electronic conversations.

This is very interesting, until know I hadn't found any good Sherlock fanfics that I liked, But you just got yourself a reader. Sherlock characterization is spot on and perfect, damn glorious bastard. You also portrayed Watson quite well.

I can't say a lot about just the first chapter, but I will keep reading
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